Talk:Charles T. Pepper/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aza24 (talk · contribs) 20:06, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Hey Doug, I feel like I was a little harsh the last time I reviewed this. I'm glad that did not discourage you from trying again, I'll leave comments soon. Aza24 (talk) 20:06, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

• It's up to you but I'm not sure "19th-century" is necessary when his years are listed right before Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Done

• saying "the Dr Pepper brand soft drink." makes it sound like it's the soft drink from brand named Dr Pepper, when the soft drink itself is the brand – this would be clearer as "the soft drink brand Dr Pepper Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Done

• I'm not convinced that "and raised a family" is needed in the lead, I would just stick to "He stayed in Virginia his entire life" – let me know if you disagree though Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Done

• ref two should be formatted in a "cite web" template – although you may just want to take it out since it looks like the other ref there already covers the line in question Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Done

• Is it known what degree he received? Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Done

• This line Pepper attended the University of Virginia for medical training and received a degree in 1855.[4][5] Pepper was a practicing physician from 1856 to 1896. He was a Confederate surgeon during the American Civil War and practiced at Emory and Henry College from 1862 to 1865 which was commandeered by the Confederate States of America and used as a hospital.[1] has some issues Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Done

• • "Pepper was a practicing physician from 1856 to 1896." is noticeably out of place in a section entitled "early life"

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• • • Perhaps just say: "Pepper attended the University of Virginia for medical training and received a degree in 1855,[4][5] beginning practice the following year" Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Done

• • The second line is phrased rather oddly, I would recommend a change to something more concise like:

•  Done

• • • "A Confederate surgeon during the American Civil War, from 1862 to 1865 he practiced at the Confederate hospital at Emory and Henry College.[1]" Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

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• I think you forgot to link the first mention of Rural Retreat in the text (in the mid life section) Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Done

• "They had five children who were all born in Rural Retreat. Four of their children grew to adulthood." is very choppy and could work better as "They had five children who were all born in Rural Retreat, four of which grew to adulthood.

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• Since Tyler was not governor when they married, this should be reflected in the text: "She was cousin to James Hoge Tyler, future Governor of Virginia." Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

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• "closed it doors going out of business" is redundant. I would pick one or the other, prefferably "going out of buissness" as "closed its doors" is rather colloquial. Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

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• link Danville Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

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• This line: Pepper's son, Louis, was the editor of the Evening Bee of Danville when he received word that Mrs. Pepper, his mother and Charles Pepper's wife, died on March 9, 1903. confuses me. Why is this line seen in from the perspective of Louis? the "his mother and Charles Pepper's wife" is also unnecessary. He shouldn't be reffered to as "Dr Pepper" here either – just "Pepper", like before. Was Pepper informed of her death from his son or something? Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Done

• Is it known what the "lingering illness" was?

•  Done = no.

• "History records" is unnecessary; everything in the article is a "record of history"

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• Having four examples of the "Dr. Prefix" floods the sentence, I would stick to two, possibly three.

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• "has been told" – you mean "has told"?

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• can you expand a little on what the stories that have to do with Ruth are?

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• I think that's it, I'll probably read through again when the changes are made to check for anymore continuity concerns.
• On hold for one week (till October 15th) Aza24 (talk) 22:03, 8 October 2020 (UTC)
• @Aza24: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

It looks great now Doug, thanks for your thoroughness. I have spot checked some sources and looked through the images, everything looks good. This article meets the GA criteria, passing now!