Talk:Changed My Mind

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review
Good articleChanged My Mind has been listed as one of the Music good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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May 25, 2022Good article nomineeListed

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Changed My Mind/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:09, 21 April 2022 (UTC)Reply


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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

I definitely have the time to review this article today! --K. Peake 07:09, 21 April 2022 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead edit

  • Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
  • Link to the lyric video in the infobox instead of external links; take "All Mine" for example
  • "on 2 February 2018 through" → "on 2 February 2018, through"
  • The writing/production sentence should come before the release one
  • Are you sure protagonist is an appropriate term for the lead when it is not used in the body at the point of the lyrics being mentioned?
  • Mention that the chart is in Sweden
  • "Sony Music promoted the single with an" → "For promotion, Sony Music released an"
  • Wikilink lyric video to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "promoted the song with live performances." → "promoted the song with a live performance on Like a Version." with the wikilink, as only relevant performance(s) should be mentioned in the lead
  • Remove Swedish singer introduction to Grant because that being solely in the body is sufficent
  • "of "Changed My Mind" on 23 November 2018." → "of the song on the tour's beginning date."

Background and release edit

  • Remove comma after third studio album
  • "writing and producing the songs." → "working on the songs." per the source not mentioning both writing and production
  • "Loelv managed production and" → "Loelv managed both production and"
  • "on 2 February 2018 through" → "on 2 February 2018, through"
  • Only the pair of dice is sourced as being featured on the artwork
  • [7][8] are not in the corresponding order with the info

Composition and lyrics edit

  • Pipe distorted to Distortion (music) and wikilink vocoder on the audio sample text
  • [9] is redundant on the text when it does not back up any of the info
  • "is a three-minute and five-second" → "is a three-minutes and five-seconds"
  • Pipe drums to Drum kit
  • Remove overly obvious wikilink on guitar per WP:OVERLINK
  • Mention keyboards in the instrumentation sentence per The Guardian ref
  • "characterized its production as" → "characterized the production as"
  • "are at times distorted with" → "are distorted on the bridge with" with the pipes
  • After the above, mention the change in octaves on the pre-chorus per The Guardian, using the "while" connective
  • "and Bruner viewed it as a" → "and Bruner viewed the song as a"
  • Pipe chorus to Refrain
  • "and "I wasn't really" → "and, "I wasn't really"
  • "she elaborated that "My idea" → "she elaborated: "My idea"
  • "she explained that" → "Stryke explained that"
  • "the line "I changed my mind".[10] As the song progresses," → "the line "I changed my mind" and as it progresses," since these sentences are short enough to be merged
  • "She said, "At that point" → "The singer said that "at that point" per this not being a full sentence
  • "best decision ever."" → "best decision ever"." per MOS:QUOTE

Reception edit

  • This section should be organized by thematic element(s), i.e. what was praised
  • Mention what the Time magazine writer actually praised about the song
  • "Graeme Virtue regarded it" → "Graeme Virtue regarded the song"
  • "and stated that "Playful" → "and stated, "Playful"
  • Pipe sci-fi to Science fiction
  • "concluding that "With any" → "concluding: "With any"
  • Pipe filler to Filler (music) per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "and remained on the ranking" → "and lasted on the chart" to be more specific

Promotion and cover version edit

  • "an accompanying lyric video for" → "a lyric video for" with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "on the set list while touring for Sway" → "on her set list when touring for Sway"
  • "on 23 November 2018 through" → "on 23 November 2018, through"

Credits and personnel edit

  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Charts edit

  • Good

References edit

  • Copyvio score looks really good at 28.1%!!!
  • Shouldn't refs 5 and 25 have various Apple Music citations since you are using them to back up the release without mentioning a country?
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 15
  • Add url-access limited to ref 17
  • Cite Vevo as publisher instead on ref 22 with the wikilink
  • MOS:CAPS issues with refs 25 and 26, or is that just how Grant is stylized?
  • Add url-access subscription to ref 27

External links edit

  • Remove the lyric video from here

Final comments and verdict edit

  •   On hold until all of the issues are fixed; this is quite a neat article! --K. Peake 09:38, 21 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
@Kyle Peake: Thanks for the review! Just letting you know that I've started addressing your comments. Should be done in a day or two :) Pancake (talk) 14:11, 26 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
PancakeMistake That was good at the time but any further updates on this? --K. Peake 07:33, 2 May 2022 (UTC)Reply
@Kyle Peake: Thank you for your patience. I've been really busy with work this last month. Let me know if I've missed any of your comments. I re-arranged the reviews a bit for better flow. Do you have any suggestions on how to organize it better? Pancake (talk) 16:00, 23 May 2022 (UTC)Reply
PancakeMistake This mostly looks good, though there are still a few issues left unfixed. [9] should not be on the audio sample text, the three-minute and five-second part needs to be altered, a comma is required before through in promotion and cover version, url-access limited and subscription both need to be added to the appropriate refs. --K. Peake 07:31, 24 May 2022 (UTC)Reply
@Kyle Peake: I think I got it all now :) Pancake (talk) 15:53, 24 May 2022 (UTC)Reply
  •  Pass now, this looks good! --K. Peake 21:05, 25 May 2022 (UTC)Reply