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Nominator: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 21:30, 29 April 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 07:04, 8 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

Will also pick this up as well.--ZKang123 (talk) 07:04, 8 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

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  • The building, designed by Henry Fernbach in the Moorish Revival style, is a New York City designated landmark and a National Historic Landmark. – Designed by Henry Fernbach in the Moorish Revival style, the synagogue is a New York City designated landmark and a National Historic Landmark.
  • A vestibule leads to the synagogue's sanctuary, a two-level space arranged in a similar manner to a Gothic church, and there are various rooms in the basement. – A vestibule leads to the synagogue's sanctuary – a two-level space arranged similarly to a Gothic church, with various rooms in the basement.
  • There is a community house across 55th Street, which contains the synagogue's religious school and numerous groups. – A community house across 55th Street contains/hosts the synagogue's religious school and numerous groups.

Early history

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More comments to come.--ZKang123 (talk) 03:10, 9 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for taking up the review. I've addressed all of the above so far. – Epicgenius (talk) 22:55, 9 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

Combined congregation

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  • After Davidson's resignation, the trustees of Ahawath Chesed Shaar Hashomayim searched for a bilingual rabbi,[25][111] a process which took a year. – After Davidson's resignation, the trustees of Ahawath Chesed Shaar Hashomayim took a year to search for a bilingual rabbi.
  • agreed to begin using the – agreed to using..
  • in mid-1917, at which point the congregation had 900 members. – in mid-1917 when the congregation had (grown to) 900 members.
  • The congregation's trustees selected, as their next senior rabbi, Nathan Krass, – The congregation's trustees selected Nathan Krass as their next senior rabbi...
  • The new name was intended to attract worshippers, both because of its location, and because the fact that the name was in English was supposed to reflect the congregation's Reform roots – The new English name, reflecting the congregation's Reform roots, and its location was intended to attract worshippers.
  • The congregation also introduced revised bylaws in 1918, forming a governing council. – The congregation also introduced revised bylaws and formed a governing council in 1918.
  • By the early 1920s, the synagogue building could not adequately accommodate many social functions and classes. This left it at a disadvantage compared with many newer synagogues, where there were community centers to attract younger, less religious generations. – By the early 1920s, the synagogue could not adequately accommodate social functions and classes, putting it at a disadvantage compared to newer synagogues with community centers that attracted younger, less religious generations.
  • Cen­tral and Free Syn­agogues. – from my understanding about this paragraph, this merger lasted at most a year?
  • The synagogue also temporarily hosted the Rock Pentecostal congregation during 1943, while the latter congregation developed a church for itself. – In 1943, the synagogue also temporarily hosted the Rock Pentecostal congregation, which developed a church for itself.
  • The project had cost $270,000 in total. – remove "had"
  • restore some stained-glass windows – restore some of the...
  • To make way for the community house, the congregation had to destroy three houses on 55th Street. – Three houses on 55th Street were demolished to make way for/to construct the community house.
  • had an endowment fund with $10 million – had an endowment fund of $10 million
  • United States' largest Jewish congregations, with 4,000 people. – remove comma
  • ubinstein said that, in the three years following the fire, 400 families had joined the congregation, for a total of 1,700 families by 2001. – From my understanding is it 400 more families joined the congregation such that the total is 1700? If so, I might say ...400 families had joined the congregation, bringing the total to 1,700 by 2001.

More comments to come.--ZKang123 (talk) 02:24, 11 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

Building

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  • Fernbach, who also constructed structures for Jewish and secular institutions. – I would mention some examples, specifically aforementioned Jewish institutions. Also I think there should be an alternative term for "constructed" given it's unlikely he constructed the structures himself. Maybe who was also the architect of...
  • A contemporary work – Which contemporary work (as mentioned by the two sources cited)?
  • By the end of the 20th century, it was believed to be the state's oldest synagogue in continuous operation. – would attribute to the New York Times. I.e. According to The New York Times, it is the state's oldest synagogue in continuous operation.
  • Might also try combine the above sentence with the subsequent statement since they discuss something similar about having a continuous congregation in attendance as well.
  • The site measures 100 by 140 feet (30 by 43 m) across, with the longer dimension along 55th Street.[300] Contemporary sources from the building's construction described the synagogue as measuring 93 feet (28 m) wide on Lexington Avenue and 140 feet (43 m) on 55th Street. – Was initially confused by the repetition of the facts then I figured: The synagogue didn't occupy the entire site designated 100 by 140 ft. Though I might try combine the facts.
  • The current lanterns are replicas,[302] which date from 1989. – The current lanterns are replicas installed in 1989. or something to that effect. "Dating from 1989" is a bit odd as though the replicas are that old or historical.
  • This is because the congregation wanted that land lot, but they also wanted to have the building's main entrance on Lexington Avenue. – This was because the congregation wanted that land lot with the building's main entrance on Lexington Avenue.
  • The exterior is dominated by two octagonal towers,[40] which measure 112 feet (34 m) tall. – The exterior is dominated by two 112-ft tall octagonal towers.
  • The tops of the domes, described in the Associated Press and Architectural Record as "onion-shaped", are decorated with gilded bands. – Personally think given two sources mentioned it, I don't think it's necessary to attribute unless it's contradicted by other sources or if there are other terms to describe the domes. Also the comparison is clear from other images. The tops of the onion-shaped domes are decorated with glided bands.
  • The roof is made of slate and is covered in gray and red shingles.[251][256][257] The roof measures 99 by 140 feet (30 by 43 m) across and has over 30,000 shingles. – The slate roof, measuring 99 by 140 feet (30 by 43 m), is covered in 30,000 shingles in gray and red.
  • is a nearly exact replica of the original roof – remove "roof".
  • manufactured in 2001 by the English firm – wonder if there's a mention of said English firm. It would be notable if it still exists
  • Prior to 2001, the synagogue did not have any air conditioning. – Would write in the positive like saying: After 2001, air-conditioning is installed in the synagogue.
  • There were originally two sets of stairs inside the vestibule, but one of the stairs was removed in 2001 – Inside the vestibule were originally two (sets/flights of) stairs, though one was removed in the 2001 renovation.
  • The synagogue's sanctuary was arranged in a similar manner to a Gothic church.[61][301] It is like Protestant churches in that the interior is divided into two aisles, which flank a central nave. – Think it's a bit odd to have these sentences side-by-side. So is the arrangement like a Gothic church or a Protestant church? Or both.
  • The nave and the aisles are separated by 12-by-12-inch (30 by 30 cm) square wooden piers – The nave and the aisles are separated by square wooden piers of 12 inch length
  • west end or rear of the sanctuary. – I noted a similar phrase was stated earlier, and was about to ask: is the rear of the sanctuary its west end or two different places? Might say the rear of the sanctuary at its west end for its first mention and just opt for either term in subsequent mentions.
  • but this was changed to 1,400 – but this was reduced...
  • are positioned at a 45-degree angle, toward the center of the nave. – remove comma
  • I wonder so far for the mention of stars, are they specifically of the Star of David or just general stars
  • A writer for The Forward said the synagogue had "a similar architectural effect to Notre Dame in Paris. – I just want to muse the irony given the Notre Dame later burned down as well.

Clergy

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  • Wikilink Angela Buchdahl in the body. I don't think "since 2014" here is necessary though.
  • The senior rabbis of Central Synagogue and its predecessors have included, in the order that they joined Central and its predecessor congregations: – This sentence wording is a bit odd in my opinion.

Services and programs

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  • Does that Central Synagogue Brotherhood still exist? Cos saying "it was home" kind of implies it doesn't exist now, though you subsequently said "These programs have continued through the 21st century."
  • Wonder if there are images of the community houses.
  • The collection includes a Torah from the Czech town of Lipnik, which was printed in the early 19th century and owned by the Memorial Scrolls Trust;[339] since 1967, the Torah has been loaned to Central. – A Torah from the Czech town of Lipnik, which was printed in the early 19th century and owned by the Memorial Scrolls Trust, was loaned to Central in 1967.
  • or ancient musical horns – Don't think you need this part given the wikilink makes it clear a shofar is an ancient musical horn. Or maybe you might write "shofar musical horns"?

That's all for prose comments.--ZKang123 (talk) 10:14, 13 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for these comments. I'll address those on Monday. – Epicgenius (talk) 20:43, 13 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

Sourcing and spot checks

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  • Earwig mainly flags some common phrases of place and organisational names.
  • Probably this part needs to be rephrased: A small row of arches runs just below the cornice, at the roof line. to A small row of arches runs at the roof line just below the cornice

A more detailed spotcheck would follow.--ZKang123 (talk) 03:10, 9 July 2024 (UTC)Reply

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