Talk:Cam Donaldson

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Melcous in topic Edit request

Edit request

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  • What I think should be changed (include citations):

1/ Take out “is a Scottish economist” and also add a capital D to Distinguished in the first para

2/ Second para should start “Cam is renowned for his research on…”.

3/ There used to be a middle para in the “Early life and education” section that has disappeared that went “In the early 1970, Express Newspapers moved his father’s job to Manchester. Due this move coinciding with Denis Law finishing his football career at Manchester City, Donaldson became a lifelong fan of the club.”

4/ The passage on Calgary should say “Whilst in Calgary, he built a group of health economics researchers and also established – with Luke Vale (University of Aberdeen; now Newcastle) and Miranda Mugford (University of East Anglia) – the Health Economics Methods Group of the Cochrane Collaboration, acting as co-convenors from 1998 to 2008.”

5/ Then, under the section on the creating the Yunus Centre, can it be replaced with “In 2010, he took up the Yunus Chair at Glasgow Caledonian University (GCU) where he established the Yunus Centre for Social Business & Health. The main contributions of this Centre have been in conceptualising and evidencing the novel thesis that non-health-focused initiatives, such as social enterprise and fair credit, operating in the most deprived communities, could improve health through enhanced social cohesion. This has included working with Nobel Peace Laureate, Professor Muhammad Yunus, to establish an international academic network of Yunus Social Business Centres. The research at GCU has attracted substantial funding from the UK’s Research Councils, the Wellcome Trust, the National Institute for Health Research and Guy’s and St Thomas’ Charity.”

6/ The personal life bit should read as “Donaldson lives near Aberdeen, with his wife and partner (since 1992), Diane, a successful university administrator. They have two children, a grandson and a granddaughter.”

  • Why it should be changed:

A couple of the changes relate to spelling (1, 2) and missing text from original version (3). The other changes relate to update in career and personal life (4, 5, 6).

  • References supporting the possible change (format using the "cite" button):

Karenmcdairmant (talk) 12:59, 11 May 2021 (UTC)Reply

Response to COI editor's requests:
  1. Not done. It is standard for wikipedia biographies to start with the nationality and occupation of the person before listing any current roles - this is a good example of a key difference between an encyclopedia biography and a resume.
  2. Not done. (a) Wikipedia's manual of style uses surnames for subjects throughout the biography. (b) A reference by a third party that called his research "renowned" or something similar would be need to be provided.
  3. This paragraph was taken out because it was completely unsourced, and what football team he is a fan of is trivial, rather than encyclopedic, information.
  4. Not done. Other people are not usually named unless they are themselves notable, and even then naming their institutions like this is the kind of content that belongs on a biography on a university's website, not in an encyclopaedia. There have also not been any sources provided for this information.
  5. Not done. No source provided, but also reads as promotional. Would need an independent source that notes these facts.
  6. Not done. Again, no sources provided, but also the word "successful" is not neutral, and it is standard in most biographies on wikipedia to list number of children but not further relatives, unless they themselves are notable.
Please remember in future to prove reliable, independent sources for any changes you are requesting. Thank you Melcous (talk) 13:40, 11 May 2021 (UTC)Reply


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