Talk:California State University, Dominguez Hills/GA2

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 06:10, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Will do this week. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 06:10, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

• Do you mind adding some history to the lead and not just random rankings? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• "any Cal State" clear up to mean Cal State university campus. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• "Governor of California " replace current link to List of California Governors. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• Mention the team mascot in the lead somewhere. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• When was it first named to Cal State College Dominquez Hills. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• Can you spell out Cal State Dominquez Hills the first time it's mention with (CSUHD) in parenthesis? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• Any other history since 1977? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• "Today, CSU Dominguez Hills is a major university for the Southern geographical region of Los Angeles County and Orange County. Total enrollment typically is around 14,500 students." source?
• "CSUDH offers forty-six undergraduate majors, twenty-two master's degrees, and a number of certificate and credential programs.[34] " why are these numbers spelled out? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• Why do you have 1 sentence paragraphs? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• " In 2012 over 35,000 attended" comma after 2012 and attended what specifically? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• "Starting in 2011 Cal State Dominguez Hills began hosting the "Honoring the Indigenous Peoples of the Americas" pow wow.[46][47]" significance of this? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• "Established in the name of Ronald E. McNair, the late NASA mission specialist who perished in the 1986 Space Shuttle Challenger explosion, the McNair program has become a national model for how low-income and first-generation college students from traditionally underserved communities who aspire to pursue advanced degrees can stand out from the substantial crowd applying for graduate school each year.[58] " link to Space Shuttle Challenger disaster, break up the long sentence, and "underserved" is not a word. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• "In 2014 following its acquisition of 21 new Steinway-designed pianos, California State University, Dominguez Hills was named an All-Steinway School, the first public four-year university in California to receive the designation.[65]" after 2014 and what is an "All-Steinway School"? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• Why the large space after ref 67? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• Spell out "STEMs". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• "new wing" any info about the old wing of the library? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• Can you combine the 3 library paragraphs? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• " Dominguez Hills competes against other universities in Division II of the NCAA in the California Collegiate Athletic Association. The men's soccer team plays at Toro Stadium (capacity 3,000). Other sports venues for the university are the Torodome (capacity 3,602) for basketball and volleyball; Toro Field (capacity 300) for baseball; and Toro Diamond (capacity 300) for softball. Select home games are nationally televised live via Internet TV." source? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)
• Are any of the sport teams successful? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)

On hold for a week. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 19:32, 18 February 2017 (UTC)

While some of this has been addressed, I'm failing it as some sections remain unsourced. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 06:21, 9 March 2017 (UTC)