Talk:Cadet scandal/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 16:40, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

I will be taking a look at this! — GhostRiver 16:40, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Lede

• Swap em dashes for commas around "also known as the Ballvé Case (Spanish: Caso Ballvé)"

Done

• "whose content" → "the contents of which"

Done

Background

Political and military context

• in the context of the Second World War, in which the country maintained its neutrality. fragment

Done

• "and the party system"

Done

• "Thanks to the coup" → "Under Uriburu's coup"

Done

• "was declared the winner"

Done

• "spin-off" → "offshoot"

Done

Gay culture in Buenos Aires

• Delink "turn of the century" per MOS:OVERLINK

Done

• "name by which they were also referred to." → "a name which also came to describe its speakers."

Done

• Delink "effeminate" and "amoral" per MOS:OVERLINK

Done

• Comma after "sought to modernize the country"

Done

• Delink "cliché" and "aristocrat" per MOS:OVERLINK

Done

Ballvé Piñero's parties

• "eighteen years younger" → "18 years his junior"

Done

• Delink "vice" and "(substance) abuse" per MOS:OVERLINK

Done

• "name which alluded to the" → "named for the"

Done

• Swap colon for comma after "in his own words"

Done

• "In medical experts" → "To medical experts"

Done

Investigation and arrest

• "him seduce other cadets" → "as he seduced other cadets"

Done

• Delink "birthday party", "discharge", and "lawsuit" per MOS:OVERLINK

Done

• "one hundred and twenty-one" → "121" per MOS:NUM

Done

Impact

Society and politics

• "the public rumor ahd begun to spread around the general public"

Done

• "about who the men involved were" → "the identities of the men involved"

Done

• "a big street fighting occurred" → "a large street fight" without the WL

Done

• "a number that parodied" → "a number parodying"

Done

• comma for em dash after "June 4, 1943,"

Done

Ensuing gay persecution

• "Goodwin was apprehend the same day as his friend," → "Goodwin was apprehended the same day as his friend"

Done

• "the age of majority until July—which was 22 years old at the time—" ((right arrow)) "the age of majority (which, at the time, was 22 years old) until July"

Done

• Delink "bestseller" per MOS:OVERLINK

Done

• "but rather "being" homosexual, becoming a cause of discharge from the army." → "but rather simply "being" homosexual was now a cause for discharge."

Done

Legacy

• "that the scandal opened "ajar the door...""

Done

• "he got access" → "he received access"

Done

• "more than two hundred" → "more than 200" per MOS:NUM

Done

References

• Good

General comments

• All pictures used are public domain and relevant
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Copyvio score looks good at 5.7%

Putting on hold for now to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions. — GhostRiver 19:18, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

GhostRiver, thank you for taking a look. I've made the corrections. Let me know if everything's ok! --ℜ𝔲𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔖𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔐𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔬 🌠 (talk) 18:31, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Looks great now, happy to pass! — GhostRiver 18:36, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Thank you! --ℜ𝔲𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔖𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔐𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔬 🌠 (talk) 18:47, 17 October 2021 (UTC)