Talk:Burmese Indians/GA1

GA Review

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Hi! I will be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have the full review up shortly. Dana boomer (talk) 23:08, 22 August 2009 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   • First of all, this article has a cleanup tag present from October 2008 that needs to be taken care of. The presence of cleanup banners is one of the things that allows reviewers to quick-fail articles, but I'm willing to give this one a chance.
   • This article is broken up into many small sections and subsections, which make it choppy and harder to read. I would suggest either combining or expanding many of the sections that are just one paragraph long.
   • The lead needs to be expanded. For an article of this length, two paragraphs are generally sufficient. The lead should give a summation of the article, without introducing major new information.
   • In-line citations need to be placed consistently either before or after punctuation. It doesn't matter which (although most editors tend to go with after), but it needs to be consistent.
   • It is generally better to use the {{see also}} and {{main}} templates, rather than just having text linking main and see also articles. Also, these links should be placed at the top of sections, not the bottom.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   • Web references need to have more information included. Web references should always have a publisher and last access date, and should have an author and publication date if possible.
   • What is reference #6 (Yangon Summary Review and Analysis) supposed to lead to? Right now it could be one of many sources.
   • What is the use of the list of works in the References section? If these are actually used as references, that's great. However, if they're more of a "Further Reading" list, the section should probably be retitled.
   • In the Anti-Indian sentiments section, the last paragraph should probably be turned into an in-line reference.
   • There are many paragraphs and even entire sections that are missing citations. While not everything has to be cited, specific facts and statistics, and anything likely to be controversial, need to be.
   • In the Language section, the article says "Most can only communicate in Burmese, due to years of assimilation and lack of education in languages other than English." Can this be referenced to a reliable source, or is it the author's conjecture?

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   • What is the criteria for inclusion in the "Notable Burmese Indians" section? Most of these people don't seem to have their own articles, although this is not a hard-and-fast guide for inclusion. Also, the list seems to be made up mainly of political leaders, with a sprinkling of religious leaders, academics and one sportsperson. Were there no other sportspersons? No one famous for acting? Famous for military service (other than revolutionary leaders)? Although I'm not suggesting this list be expanded 10-fold, I am interested in what the selection criteria for these people was.

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   • Although the images check out for appropriate use and tagging, I am surprised that no images are included of actual Burmese Indians, rather than just their temples.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

This article has quite a few major issues, and so I am placing it on hold for now. This is not a complete review - I will be waiting for someone to address the above points before I complete a full prose and reference review of the article. I will be watchlisting this page, so if you have any questions, please let me know here. Dana boomer (talk) 23:33, 22 August 2009 (UTC)

This article has been on hold for a week now, with no edits, despite notifications to the nominator's talk page. The editor has indicated a willingness to work on the article, however, and so I will leave it on hold for an extra two days. If, at that time, no work has taken place, I will have to fail the article's GA nomination. Dana boomer (talk) 02:54, 2 September 2009 (UTC)

OK so I have started working on the article.

The cleanup article is so dated that no one seems to know why exactly it is here.Since a GA Review is underway, I am removing it believing that all cleanup will happen .

Applied templates as suggested.

In-line citations are now placed consistently after the punctuation

Added pictures of some Burmese Indians.

As the article and some of the references state, Burmese Indians post 1962 have been trying to "keep their head down" and get by life . Hence, most of the famous people seem to be be "very old" and political.

Changed the reference in the Anti-Indian sentiments section

Will work on the lead now. Anything else?

Vinay84 (talk) 13:32, 3 September 2009 (UTC)

There are still a few things that need to be done before I can start reviewing the prose:

• The Religion and Language sections are still missing references. This is especially important for the second paragraph of the Religion section and the middle sentence of the Language section, as I pointed out above.
• I was apparently not clear in what needed to be done with the References section. If some of these are Further reading, they should be moved into a seperate section entitled "Further reading". The references should be either general references that were used to reference the article as a whole, or references with specific in-line cites.
• Reference #3 (bookrags) should instead be referenced to the book from which this article came (see the bottom of the webpage) with a link through the title to the bookrags site.
• The web references still need to be expanded with publishers and access dates at the very least.
• Please give more information for Reference #17. Dates and the title of the interview/article, as well as a link to a web version, if available, would be appreciated.
• A few of the references and external links are dead or time out, see here.
• What is Reference #9? Maybe a book, but I can't find more information for it anywhere in the notes or references sections.
• What would you think of integrating the Racial Relations section into the History section? There seems to be quite a bit of duplicated information, and the information in the History section is presented in a much more neutral manner than that in the Racial Relations section.

These need to be corrected, and then I will be able to do a full prose review of the article. Thank you for your work so far on the article. Dana boomer (talk) 14:02, 3 September 2009 (UTC)

Integrated Racial relations and History sections

Links have now been repaired. Thanks Dana for the toolserver link

Vinay84 (talk) 05:23, 4 September 2009 (UTC)

Is work still progressing on this article? There is still quite a bit of work needed on references (mostly adding needed information), and the first paragraph of the Religion section still needs to be referenced. This is all still basic stuff that needs to be attended to, even before I do a prose review. However, the work you've done so far is good, and please keep it up :) Dana boomer (talk) 23:49, 9 September 2009 (UTC)

There are still quite a few tweaks that need to be made to references, giving more information and formatting. If this isn't done within the next couple of days, I will be forced to fail the review. Dana boomer (talk) 14:35, 16 September 2009 (UTC)

All internet references now have Access Date and publisher. Except Economic roles , other sections are bigger than a paragraph.There is a scarcity of Neutral information regarding this topic due to the geopolitical nature .Can you please be more specific what further needs to be done?

--Vinay84 (talk) 07:20, 18 September 2009 (UTC)

Further Comments

Sorry it's taken me so long to get these last comments to you. Here are my remaining comments on prose and references, which is all that needs to be done to bring this article to GA status.

• The lead still needs to be longer. For an article of this length, it should be two paragraphs, each about the same length as the current one, that summarize the entire article without including new information.

• Converted to two paras and expanded a bit.--RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 02:10, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

• The lead overuses parenthetical insertations, making the text choppy and hard to read. Please integrate at least some of these into prose.

• rewritten removing parenthetical insertions.--RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 02:10, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

• The 1930 Anti-Indian Riots section needs to be cleaned up. There is repetition between the first and last paragraphs, as I think information was just copied and pasted in during the combining of the History and Race Tensions sections. Also, the numbered list could be easily turned into a paragraph of prose, which would make it read better. I think there is a duplicated reference just hanging out after the numbered section, as well. Third, the prose needs some tweaking, phrasings such as "reduced economic pie" are unencyclopedic.

• rewritten. --RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 02:10, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

• The first paragraph of the Expulsion of Indians from Burma in 1962 section needs a check for POV wording. Phrasing like "relentless persecution" should be removed and the overall tone of the paragraph checked.

• rewritten. --RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 21:04, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

• The Economic roles section is largely duplicated in the The Second World War and after section, and I think there is a good argument for these two to be combined. Thoughts?

  I agree. I think the way to go is to remove it from the expulsion section and keep it in the economic section. Will try to get to it later tonight. --RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 22:45, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

  I moved the economic aspects from expulsion to 'Economic role' and some community specific things to 'The community' under culture.--RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 00:33, 10 October 2009 (UTC)

• Reference #12 has an accessdate parameter issue

• fixed--RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 03:02, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

• Reference #16 is not working for some reason, probably due to a naming issue

  fixed--RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 03:02, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

• Reference #17 is not a reliable reference, since there is a notification on the bottom that some of the information on the page came from Wikipedia and you're just making a circular reference

  removed. I doubt if this is true anyway but I'll look for a reference.--RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 03:02, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

• Reference #18 is what? A journal, a book?
• Reference #21 needs further information - a date mainly.
• Ref #8 now needs more info - I think it's a book, but I'm not sure.

• fixed. --RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 21:12, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

• Ref #10 needs a title, publisher and access date.

  fixed. --RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 21:19, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

• What is Ref #17? A book?

  A book. Found the author but unable to find a date.--RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 22:30, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

• Ref #20 needs a publisher.

  Replaced with the South China Morning Post article information. Unfortunately I can't get a url for it but still trying.--RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 22:43, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

Like I said, these are pretty much my final comments on the article. Please let me know your thoughts and replies - feel free to make replies line by line underneath the above comments. Dana boomer (talk) 01:59, 29 September 2009 (UTC)

Is work still progressing on this article? A couple of tweaks have been made since I put up my final comments, but not much has been done. This article is really close to GA status, and it would be a shame to have to fail it due to lack of work on the part of the nominator. Please let me know. Dana boomer (talk) 00:07, 3 October 2009 (UTC)

I'll try and take a crack at it on Monday. Thanks for the very specific comments above - it does make the task manageable. --RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 02:15, 4 October 2009 (UTC)

Is this work going to be completed? The final comments were made over a week ago, and nothing has been done. If work has not progressed on the article within two days, I will have to fail it. Dana boomer (talk) 17:46, 8 October 2009 (UTC)

Corrected citation 18 to a proper website

Reference 20 redirected to a proper source

--Vinay84 (talk) 05:44, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

Things are looking better. I've struck the issues above that have been resolved, and added a few more comments on references to the bottom of the list. Keep up the good work, and this article should be to GA status soon! Dana boomer (talk) 17:49, 9 October 2009 (UTC)

Looking good. I think the only thing left to do is the fact tag in the Languages section, which was placed there after an unreliable reference was removed. Once this is taken care of, we should be good to go for GA status. Dana boomer (talk) 14:30, 11 October 2009 (UTC)

It's going to be impossible to get references for this so I've removed the two things that need citations (that Arabic is spoken in Burma and that ethnic Indians mostly speak only Burmese). --RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 00:59, 12 October 2009 (UTC)

The article looks good. I've made a few more copyediting tweaks, and I'm now passing the article to GA status. Nice work! Dana boomer (talk) 16:23, 12 October 2009 (UTC)

Thank you Dana, for your effort and Patience.--Vinay84 (talk) 03:33, 13 October 2009 (UTC)

I echo the thanks for your patience and extremely constructive reviewing. --RegentsPark (sticks and stones) 02:07, 14 October 2009 (UTC)

Merger again after dividing?

Are some of the editors simply playing shuffling games? At first my Burmese Indian article is cut off and made into numerous sub articles. The person who done that dividing even never acknowledge about this and my contribution edit history was lost in action. People could think that the person who started the new article had contributed all but almost 100% of that article and others e.g. Indians in Burmese History and Origin of Burmese Indians are my contributions. He had done in good intension but my contribution history is lost in the process. Now want to merger again? Be careful, Burmese Indian is already a good article and you could ruin in the process. Darz kkg (talk) 07:09, 15 August 2010 (UTC)

Ku La(ကုလားလူမျိုး)

The word "Ku La" is not slang. It is a traditional Burmese word derived from Pali language. For example, centuries ago, "Foreign Minister" was offically called "Ku La Woon" where "Ku La" means "Foreign" and "Woon" means "Minister". Another example is that "United Nations" called "Ku-La-Thet-Mat-Ga(ကုလသမဂ္ဂ)" where "Ku La" means "Foreign or International" and "Thet-Mat-Ga" means "Association". Burmese refer all Indo-aryan people as "Ku La". Indian people are called "Hindu-Ku La", Arab and Bengali people are call "Muslim-Ku La" and Caucasians were called "Ku La Phyu" which means "White Foreigner". Today some scholars, especially Muslims, claim that the word "Ku La" is racist terms but actually not and it is a traditional Burmese word derived form Pali language which is considered as scared language for Burmese. There are hundreds of Burmese words which include "Ku La". I just corrected wrong description that "Ku La" is slang. 203.81.165.145 (talk) 06:46, 3 December 2012 (UTC)

My worries written above came true

Some of the editors are simply playing the FUNNY shuffling games. Merger again after dividing and the two chapters below are lost in the process. SHAME TO YOU WIKI EDITORS. Just look at this in the article:

History 

See also: Origin of Burmese Indians and Indians in Burmese History

Both disappeared in the thin air. I hate to contribute to Wiki again because of this kind od silly editings.Darz kkg (talk) 11:11, 29 April 2011 (UTC)

Daw Tint Tint"

She was a Burmese Indian migrated to India and became Indian of Burmese origin, after marrying with the future Indian President. So please kindly stop deleting my posting about her in this article. Please stop SPLITTING the hairs. Darz kkg (talk) 05:02, 9 March 2015 (UTC)