Talk:British industrial architecture/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Chiswick Chap in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:40, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:51, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- "the industrial revolution in this" that's typically capitalised.
- Done.
- "offers a connection to the birth of the modern world." whimsical, not encyclopedic in tone.
- Edited.
- (I ADORE that lead image, I had a dreadful journey back from Reading one day and ended up on the North Circular, passing that building made it almost all worthwhile)...
- Thanks!
- "1932–5, " -> "1932–1935, "
- Done.
- "once derided, now admired" I don't think this is appropriate for encyclopedia.
- Edited.
- "the industrial revolution with" see above. Apply the fix to following instances too.
- replaced.
- "of the Iron Bridge across " our article just calls it The Iron Bridge.
- Fixed.
- "Bedlam furnaces" linked in the caption but not here? And in the caption called Bedlam Furnaces...
- Done.
- "World Heritage site" link WHS. Or even the more specific List of World Heritage Sites in the United Kingdom?
- Linked.
- In the image captions, check for overlinking, almost everything is already linked above.
- Fixed.
- "1777-9" -> 1777–1779.
- Done.
- "Scaling up" not sure how informative this heading is.
- Edited.
- "corn mills, malt houses, breweries and tanneries" might consider linking some of the slightly more obscure things, like malt house/tannery?
- Done.
- "as war raised grain prices" which war?
- The French Revolutionary Wars; soon after, the Napoleonic Wars...
- "Murray's Mills," Murrays' Mills.
- Fixed.
- "Murray's Mills (for cotton) on the Rochdale Canal, Manc" see above for Mills, and Rochdale Canal is overlinked.
- Fixed.
- "storey Corn Mill" is there a reason it's capitalised?
- Fixed.
- "between 1795 and 1805" move that to after the mention of Telford.
- Repositioned all the dates here.
- More overlinking in most of the captions.
- Fixed.
- "time of king Henry VIII for" remove "king".
- Fixed.
- "Chatham Dockyard: from right to" overlinked.
- Fixed.
- "1785[13]" full stop before ref.
- Done.
- "No. 3 covered slip" do our readers know what this means?
- Clarified explanation in sentence.
- "in 1838.[14][11] " ref order.
- Fixed.
- "Dockyard, Chatham: No. 3 " Chatham overlinked.
- Fixed.
- "pagoda-like" link pagoda.
- Linked.
- "Functional design" image captions are full of overlinked terms.
- Fixed.
- "Early 19th century" full stop.
- Added.
- "for beer" no need to link common words.
- Fixed.
- "became the "workshop of the world".[" according to?
- Disraeli.
- "Eccles Shorrock's India Mill, Darwen and its 300 foot high Italianate campanile chimney, 1867[19]" full of overlinking, and convert 300 foot.
- Done.
- "Cathedrals of progress" again, a little POV.
- The exact phrase was Gautier's "Cathedrals of the new humanity", cited, but "of progress" captures its meaning pretty closely.
- "Bristol Temple Meads Station" -> "Bristol Temple Meads railway station"
- Done.
- Station isn't capitalised in most of these.
- Fixed.
- E.g. Paddington Station -> London Paddington station.
- Fixed.
- Check all the image captions, masses of overlinking going on. I won't mention it again.
- Fixed.
- "1836–40" 1836–1840.
- Fixed.
- "Grade II* listed " normally hyphenated in this usage and link?
- Done.
- "1903–4" 1903–04.
- Fixed.
- "1903-4" same.
- Fixed.
- "1932–5 " -> "1932–1935"
- Fixed.
- "combination of Art Deco" overlinked.
- Fixed.
- "have taken up the challenge" doesn't feel encyclopedic.
- Edited.
- Nothing from the 21st century?
- All right, added.
- "Jones, Edgar" en-dash in year range.
- Fixed.
A nice article, lots to do here, but optimistic. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 15:58, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks! All done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:12, 7 September 2021 (UTC)