Talk:Brave (Joyryde album)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 20:25, 10 October 2020 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Will start this review tomorrow --K. Peake 20:25, 10 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Where does the body state that recording started in 2018?

• Removed the recording bit, can't difinitivly prove that production started that year.

• Replace hlist with bullet points in the infobox

• Done.

• Wikilink UK bass

• Done.

• Remove venue parameter as that is for live recordings

• Removed.

• Remove all caps stylisation from the lead since this is not supposed to be noted for albums

• Removed.

• Remove wikilink on studio album

• Removed.

• Remove "American record label" introduction to the label since this context is not needed

• Removed.

• Target Hard Recs to Hard (music festival)

• Done.

• "and features: Mika Means," → "and features guest appearances from Mika Means," with the appropriate wikilink

• Changed.

• Remove target on NoLay

• Removed.

• "It includes the 2016 song "Damn" (featuring Freddie Gibbs) as a bonus track." → ""Damn" is included as a bonus track, which features Freddie Gibbs."

• Changed.

• "distinct genres: Bass house," → "distinct genres of house," with the appropriate target

• Changed.

• Wikilink UK bass

• Done.

• "The album's themes reflect" → "The themes of it reflect"

• Changed.

• "were released as promotional singles:" → "were released as singles in 2019:" with the target

• Changed.

• ""Yuck" featuring Gold," → ""Yuck", which features Gold,"

• Changed.

• "Ford's collaboration with Skrillex," → "Joyryde's collaboration with Skrillex," with the wikilink

• Changed.

• "the debut single of the album;" → "the album's lead single;" with the wikilink

• Changed.

• "the announcement of the actual debut single "I'm Gone"" → "the ultimate release of "I'm Gone" as the first single"

• Changed.

• "while coping with drug withdrawals" → "around the time of coping with drug withdrawals"

• Changed.

• "Three months after..." remove this sentence as you have already wrote about the single and the others

• Removed.

• "seventeen months after the album's original" → "17 months after the original" per MOS:NUM

• Changed.

• "Upon its release, Brave received positive reviews" → "Brave received positive reviews"

• Changed.

• "who noted its attention" → "who noted the attention"

• Changed.

• "sound design while saying that" → "sound design, while a few said that"

• Changed.

• "most anticipated albums." → "most anticipated albums of 2020."

• Changed.

• "The single "I'm Gone" was selected" → ""I'm Gone" was selected"

• Changed.

• Target Bass House to Bass house (music)

• Done.

• Target G-House to Ghetto house

• Done.

Background

• "John Ford uploaded a photo" → "Joyryde uploaded a photo" as needs to be changed on multiple cases, since a lot of this is about his musical career not personal life

• Will change, though since you've specifically listed when to change it from his real name to his stage name, I'll follow those.

• "of Owsla's logo." → "of record label Owsla's logo." with the wikilink

• Changed.

• "Skrillex later posted" → "The record label's signee Skrillex later posted"

• Changed.

• "which teased a collaboration with Ford." → "that teased a collaborative track with Joyryde."

• Changed.

• "of an album.[3] Skrillex's record label, Owsla, released the song" → "of an album;[3] Owsla released the song as a single" with the target

• Changed.

• "Soon after Ford announced "Agen Wida" he announced his debut album," → "Soon after announcing "Agen Wida", Joyryde announced his debut studio album"

• Changed.

• "Ford delayed Brave" → "Joyryde delayed Brave"

• Changed.

• Wikilink Twitter

• Done.

• Merge the third paragraph with the second para

• Merged.

• "Three months later," → "Nearly three months later,"

• Changed.

• "Ford announced that" → "Joyryde announced that"

• Changed, There were multiple instances of this exact wording, which is kinda weird, but I've changed them as well.

• "the first single from his album" → "the lead single from Brave" with the wikilink

• Changed.

• "confused fans as some believed" → "confused fans, as some believed"

• Changed.

• "as Ford had announced it" → "due to Joyryde having announced it"

• Changed.

• "released as the first single" → "released as the lead single"

• There were multiple instances of this exact wording as well, so I've hanged them too.

• "released via Hard Recs, a subsidiary" → "was released via Hard Recs, which is a subsidiary"

• Changed.

• Target to Hard (music festival) should only be on "of the same name" text

Done.

• "The release of "I'm Gone" confirmed" → "The release being through the record label confirmed"

• Changed.

• "meaning that "Agen Wida" would" → "reaffirming that "Agen Wida" would"

• Changed.

• Merge the final para with this one

• Merged

• "Ford posted a teaser video" → "Joyryde posted a teaser video"

• Changed.

• Wikilink social media

• Done.

• "early March 2020 showing" → "early March 2020, showing"

• Changed.

• "confirmed the album would feature seventeen tracks," → "confirmed Brave would feature 17 tracks,"

• Changed.

• "Ford had released in total under the Joyryde alias." → "John Ford had released in total under the Joyryde alias at the time."

• Changed.

Production and composition

Recording

• Img should be moved to the release section while staying on left; I will provide further instructions for the cover sub-section relevant to this

• Moved.

• "Brave's album artwork" → "Brave's album artwork" on the img main text, also wikilink X-ray

• Done and done.

• Remove wikilink on extended play

• Removed.

• "said that he did not feel like himself and." → "said that he did not feel like himself during this time period."

• Changed.

• "hallucinations and suicidal thoughts and put him" → "hallucinations and suicidal thoughts, among other mental issues, and put Ford"

• Changed.

• "to finish the extended play." → "to finish the EP."

• Changed.

• "before he would" → "before he could"

• Changed.

• "but later could not remember making" → "but later could not remember coming up with"

• Changed.

• "but he suffered from" → "but suffered from"

• Changed.

• "He finished one song" → "Ford finished one song"

• Changed.

• The second para should be merged with the first one

• Done.

Music and lyrics

• "explores genres including" → "explores the genres of"

• Changed.

• "conveying it as a" → "conveying the analysis as a"

• Changed.

• "He went on to say" → "Ford went on to say that"

• Changed.

• "but what he wanted it to be." → "though he wanted Brave to be good." since this is what he actually is speaking about

• That makes more sense, changed.

• "Ford concluded saying" → "Ford concluded by saying"

• Changed.

• "Ford makes use of vocals from featured artists and samples" → "Joyryde makes use of vocals from featured artists and vocal samples"

• Changed.

• Target Damn to Damn (Joyryde song)

• Done.

• Change the bass house genre of "I'm Gone" to house per WP:STICKTOSOURCE, as that is what the ref says and it mentions a bassline separately

• Done, and I'm guessing I wouldn't link house to "House music" because it already was a paragraph before.

• Remove target on trap

• Done.

• [19] should be solely at the end of the sentence

• Done, I don't know why I put it there in the first place...

• "produced by Ford while medicated" → "that was produced by Ford when he was medicated"

• Changed.

• "He felt his" → "Ford felt his"

• Changed.

• "his life as that is what he felt brought himself" → "his life, due to him feeling that was what brought himself"

• Changed.

• "female rap vocals based" → "female rap vocals, based"

• Changed.

• Target synth to Synthesizer

• Done.

• "The second single "Yuck" is" → "The track "Yuck" is"

• Changed

• Remove target on hip hop

• Done.

• "and trap music[23] and features" → "and trap music[23], and features"

• Changed.

• "Ford was impressed by" → "Joyryde was impressed by"

• Changed.

• "It makes use of" → "The song makes use of"

• Changed.

• "rather than Ford's" → "rather than Joyryde's"

• Changed.

• Wikilink time signature

• Done.

• [25] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [24]

• Done.

• "over top." → "over the top."

• Changed.

• "estimated he only spent nine hours" → "estimated that only nine hours were spent"

• Changed.

• "and left the majority of the record" → "and had left the majority of Brave"

• Changed.

• "he did not want" → "Ford did not want"

• Changed.

• "if he continued working on it." → "if he did so."

• Changed.

• "The third single, "Madden"," → "The track "Madden""

• Changed.

• Merge this para with the above one

• Done.

• Wikilink Method Man and add the song's release year in brackets

• Done and added.

• Remove target on house music plucks

• Done.

• "It is a mix" → "The song is a mix"

• Changed.

• "hip hop and makes use of" → "hip hop, with it making use of"

• Changed.

• The Wolf of Wall Street should be italicised

• Done.

• "set on a" → "that is set in a"

• Changed.

• "arrangement set at a tempo" → "arrangement, with a tempo" with the wikilink

• Changed.

• [33][34][32] should be put in numerical order

• Done.

• "was good but felt a" → "was good, though felt a"

• Changed.

• "by making it" → "by making the song"

• Changed.

• "and making the song sound more" → "and leading to it sounding more"

• Changed.

• "He did not want" → "Ford did not want"

• Changed.

• "in the song as" → "in the song, as"

• Changed.

Cover

• Move this to being the final sentence of the release section's fist para

• Moved

• "The cover for" → "The cover art for"

• Changed.

• "Mexican Painter Frida Kahlo following" → "Mexican painter Frida Kahlo, taken following"

• Changed.

Release

• Retitle to Release and promotion

• Done.

• "Ford announced the" → "Joyryde announced the"

• Changed.

• Remove wikilink on social media

• Done.

• "to be on 3 April via" → "to be on 3 April, through"

• Changed.

• Remove target on Hard Recs

• Done.

• Your EDM should not be italicised

• Bit weird seeing as they are an online magazine, but done regardless.

• "was to be released" → "was slated to be released"

• Changed.

• "Ford revealed that" → "Joyryde revealed that"

• Changed.

• "before its announcement," → "before the album's announcement,"

• Changed.

• Remove target on singles

• Done.

• "It was made available" → "Brave was made available"

• Changed.

• "on the same day as its announcement." → "on 17 March 2020." to reintroduce the date

• Changed.

• "The album was released on digital download stores and streaming services with" → "The album was released for digital download and streaming on the scheduled date, containing"

• Changed.

• "Ford's 2016 single" → "with Joyryde's 2016 Freddie Gibbs collaborative single" with the wikilink

• Changed.

• Remove target on "Damn"

• Done.

• Second para should be merged with the first one

• Done.

• "It was composed of" → "The mix was composed of"

• Changed.

• "songs by other artists such as" → "songs by other artists, such as"

• Changed.

• "The set was later uploaded" → "It was later uploaded"

• Changed.

Singles

• "Ford featured two" → "Joyryde featured two" on the img main text and wikilink Hollywood Palladium

• Changed and done.

• "being "I'm Gone" which was released as a single" → "being "I'm Gone", which was released as the lead single"

• Changed.

• "the song surfaced online," → "the song had surfaced online,"

• Changed.

• "its official release." → "the official release."

• Changed.

• "official release and launched Hard Recs." → "official release by Hard Recs, launching the record label."

• Changed.

• "believed that Ford was" → "believed that Joyryde was"

• Changed.

• "Ford's previous song," → "Joyryde's previous song,"

• Changed.

• Remove wikilink on "Agen Wida"

• Done.

• "was thought to be released as the lead single from Brave;" → "was thought to have been released as the lead single from the album;"

• Changed.

• "The song's contrast" → "The latter's contrast"

• Changed.

• Dancing Astronaut should not be italicised

• Done.

• "depiction of Ford's" → "depiction of Joyryde's"

• Changed.

• Target classical to Classical music

• Done.

• "praising Ford's sound" → "praising Joyryde's sound"

• Changed.

• ""Yuck" was released next on" → ""Yuck" was released as the second single from Brave on"

• Changed.

• "2019 and featured 20-year-old rapper Gold." → "2019, with a feature from rapper Gold."

• Changed.

• "of Ford's signature style" → "of Joyryde's signature style"

• Changed.

• "of the composition." → "of the song's composition."

• Changed.

• Your EDM should not be italicised

• Done.

• "genres as well;" → "genres alongside trap and hip-hop;"

• Changed.

• "Ford's distinctive style." → "Joyryde's distinctive style."

• Changed.

• Dancing Astronaut should not be italicised

• Done.

• "of Ford's most" → "of Joyryde's most"

• Changed.

• "Gold's lyrical delivery solidified" → "Gold's delivery solidified"

• Changed.

• "to maintain a sense" → "for maintaining a sense"

• Changed.

• Remove the speech mark from the end of this sentence as it is not from any started quote

• Done.

• "Peach Gallagher praised the single writing that Ford's" → "Peach Gallagher from Run The Trap praised the single, writing that Joyryde's"

• Changed.

• "turns "the party" → "turn "the party"

• Changed.

• "Ford released "Madden" as" → "Joyryde released "Madden" as"

• Changed.

• "The song played during Ford's" → "The song had been played during Joyryde's"

• Changed.

• "Ford wrote that after" → "Ford said that after"

• Changed.

• Remove wikilink on The Wolf of Wall Street

• Done.

• "On 26 July, he featured" → "On 26 July 2019, Joyryde featured"

• Changed.

• "his live set" → "his live set at the"

• Changed.

• "The energetic release, described by" → "The energetic single, as described by"

• Changed.

• Run the Trap → Run The Trap as that is how it is identified

• As there are multiple instances of this, I've changed this as well as all the other ones as well.

• "with Ford's signature" → "that features Joyryde's signature"

• Changed.

• "Matthew Meadow of Your EDM wrote about" → "Meadow wrote about"

• Changed.

• "mixed with the song's" → "being mixed with the song's"

• Changed.

• "that only Ford had been" → "that only Joyryde has been"

• Changed.

• "Meadow continued to say the song" → "He continued, saying the song"

• Changed.

• "in Ford's repertoire." → "in Joyryde's repertoire."

• Changed.

• "The release of the fourth single" → "The release of Brave's fourth single"

• Changed.

• "Ford explained that" → "Joyryde explained that"

• Changed.

• "to postpone it as he" → "to postpone the release of the song because he"

• Changed.

• "the day before its initial release." → "the day before the song's scheduled release."

• Changed.

• "was later released on" → "was ultimately released as a single on"

• Changed.

• "he wanted no make" → "he wanted to make"

• Changed.

• "to add contrast" → "to add a contrast"

• Changed.

• "from Ford's live sets." → "from his live sets."

• Changed.

• Run the Trap → Run The Trap

• Changed from previous edits.

• "in Ford's DJ mixes," → "in Joyryde's DJ mixes,"

• Changed.

• "Serrano also described how" → "Serrano further described how"

• Changed.

Music video

• "The "Thrill" music video debuted" → "The music video for the track "Thrill" debuted" with the wikilink

• Changed.

• "on Ford's" → "through Joyryde's"

• Changed.

• [49][48][50][51] should be put in numerical order

• Done.

• Wikilink Facebook

• Done.

• "who played the" → "that played the"

• Changed.

• "before the music video's release." → "before the release."

• Changed.

Critical reception

• "Critical response to Brave" → "Critical response to Brave from music critics" with the target

• Changed.

• "Billboard's Kat Bein praised it highly," → "Bein praised the album highly,"

• Changed.

• "the best the song for its" → "the best song, noting its"

• Changed.

• Dancing Astronaut should not be italicised

• Done.

• "the anticipation and that the songs" → "the anticipation, while commenting that the songs"

• Changed.

• "with Ford's signature" → "with Joyryde's signature"

• Changed.

• "Writing for Your EDM, Karlie Powell praised the album" → "Powell praised the album"

• Changed.

• "Ford put into the album" → "Joyryde put into the album"

• Changed.

• "She said the song "Brooklyn" was her personal favourite," → "Wright said "Brooklyn" was her personal favourite song,"

• Changed.

• "Online magazines included" → "Multiple online magazines included"

• Changed.

• "Your EDM and Run the Trap wrote about" → "Your EDM and Run The Trap wrote about"

• Changed from previous edits.

• "for their respective lists" → "on their respective lists"

• Changed.

• "mentioned the album's delayed" → "mentioned its delayed"

• Changed.

• Remove target on Billboard

• Done.

• "included the album on" → "included Brave on"

• Changed.

• "list in an article" → "lists in an article"

• Changed.

• "The song "I'm Gone" was awarded" → ""I'm Gone" was awarded"

• Changed.

• "noting its exploration" → "with the staff noting the exploration"

• Changed.

• Target chords to Chord (music)

• Done.

• Remove target on bass house

• Done.

• "breakbeats and calling it a" → "breakbeats, going on to call the song a"

• Changed.

• "on the Best of 2019 by" → "on the Best of 2019, voted for by"

• Changed.

Track listing

• Digital download → Track listing for Brave

• Changed.

• Target Isabella Gotti to NoLay

• Done.

• Wikilink Freddie Gibbs under writers

• Done.

Personnel

• Good

Release history

• Release formats for Brave → Release dates and formats for Brave

• Changed.

• Target Hard Recs to Hard (music festival)

• Done.

References

• Copyvio score looks good at 10.7%

• Nice, guess that means I wouldn't need to do any major re-writes then.

• Make sure all of these archived by using the tool

• I Tried to use IABot to make sure its all good, but apparently I've been blocked from using it.

• Run the Trap → Run The Trap on all refs using it

• Done.

• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 1; I am not talking about the name Joyryde as that is the stylisation and keep it in all caps on any of the refs where it is alread

• Done.

• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 2 and cite Dancing Astronaut as publisher instead, keeping the wikilink

• From what I understand, you want me to replace the "name of website" bit with "publisher", so I've done that.

• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 3, 4, 10, 46 and 50

• Done

• Fix MOS:QWQ and MOS:CAPS issues with refs 7, 17, 19, 22, 23, 27, 28, 33, 34, 36, 42, 44, 48, 51

• Done

• Cite Your EDM as publisher instead for all refs using it

• Done

• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with refs 11, 15, 18, 20, 21, 24, 25, 30, 32, 35, 38, 41, 43, 46, 53

• Done

• Cite Dancing Astronaut as publisher instead for all refs using it

• Done

• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 47 and cite YouTube as publisher instead

• Done, though I left "JOYRYDE" and "MAJILLA" as that is the stylisation, as you've said previously.

• Cite Apple Music (US) as publisher for ref 62 with the wikilink

• Done.

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold but I noticed an issue throughout was referring to Joyryde by his real name too much, kudos for your quick responses so far though! --K. Peake 20:19, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

• MicroPowerpoint Nice quick fixes, I will now ✓ Pass this! --K. Peake 07:37, 13 October 2020 (UTC)