Talk:Brandon Medders/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:23, 8 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "a 4-seam" literally no idea what that means. And should it be four-seam?
• "Born in 1980, Medders" you already said in the opening sentence he was born in 1980.
• " to draft him" is there a link?
• "minor leagues" likewise.
• "becoming a free agent" perhaps "once again.."
• "three saves.[5] Medders" overlinked.
• "2002 was the... " avoid starting sentences with a numeral.
• labrum - link.
• "call up a fresh arm to help a tired bullpen" hey, I'm certainly no expert but this reads rather whimsical and not particularly encyclopedic in tone.
  • Changed fresh to rested. The rest is what the source says. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:22, 9 September 2021 (UTC)
    • If it's a quote, quote it. "rested arm to help a tired bullpen" isn't encylcopedic. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 22:26, 9 September 2021 (UTC)
      • Decided to just take it out. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 13:54, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
• "September.[27] He became" merge these two small sentences.
• "invitation to spring training.[2] " overlinked.
• ESPN is italicised 4 times out of 5...
  • The external link is a template; I can't change the formatting there. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 22:25, 9 September 2021 (UTC)
    • Consistency then. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 22:25, 9 September 2021 (UTC)
• " Brandon Medders, ESPN: August 26, 2009.[30] fragment, no period.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:28, 9 September 2021 (UTC)