Talk:BonBon/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:22, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This looks like a larger article than most of yours, will start a review shortly! --K. Peake 06:22, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Dancehall should not be capitalised, also why are the genres ordered differently in the infobox from elsewhere?
• Remove the musically part from the fourth sentence, starting with "A dance-pop..." followed by the other genres
• "with its Albanian-language lyrics implying an" → "its Albanian-language lyrics imply an"
• "as well as Istrefi's appearance and vocal delivery, being linkened to" → "Some praised Istrefi's vocal delivery, linkening it to" as a new sentence
• "and reaching the top 20 in multiple countries." → "and reaching the top 10 in four other countries." per top 20 not being mentioned anywhere in the body
• "It became Istrefi's breakthrough" → "The song became Istrefi's breakthrough"
• ""BonBon" was awarded" → "It was awarded" removing the high sales part that is implied
• "including platinum in" → "alongside a platinum certification in" and mention the French certification organization
• Remove the word official from the YouTube channel part, as that is implied
• Remove her dress style per lack of notability for the lead

Background and composition

• The Balkans is not directly mentioned by the source
• The song being her first ever to chart in Albania is not mentioned by the source, so either add a chart history or remove this part
• "made its international breakthrough" → "made her international breakthrough"
• "with the production by" → "with the production handled by"
• Pipe mastered to Mastering (audio)
• Pipe mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
• [8] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [9]
• Where are some of the lyrics being in English specifically sourced? If not, add the Billboard ref here.
• "and sings about self-love and that she do not" → "singing about self-love and how she does not"

Reception and accolades

• Retitle to Reception since there is only two accolades
• "was met with generally positive reviews" → "was met with widespread acclaim"
• "appearance and vocal delivery, and constantly compared them" → "vocal delivery, constantly comparing it" since she is the lead artist
• [7][11][12][13][14] is too many refs at the end of one sentence per WP:OVERCITE; move some around the sentence to appropriate points
• Give context showing that the link to Major Lazer was praise
• What makes Think In Electronic reliable; I cannot see evidence of even any editorial process?
• If the above source is kept, remove South African website introduction and write "The staff of" before it

Reference is now [53] Iaof2017 (talk) 16:17, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

• Remove German radio station introduction to BigFM and do not italicise it
• Wikilink as reggae instead
• "were destined for" → "was destined for" but the evening quote is not sourced

It's mentioned in the end "sind aber auch prädestiniert für einen gemütlichen Chill-Abend" Iaof2017 (talk) 16:20, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

• "Fans of "BonBon" include" → "Fans of "BonBon" included" and start a new para at this point, as the info is separate from reviews
• Pipe to Top Music Awards 2016 should be on 2016 Top Music Awards
• Remove wikilink on Tirana per WP:OVERLINK on obvious ones

Commercial performance

• The Greece, Romania and Sweden charts should come after all of the others since they are secondary ones
• "were achieved in countries including the" → "were achieved in the" because these are all of the remaining top 10 positions
• The source for Slovakia is not loading
• "Switzerland,[42] and Ukraine." → "Switzerland[42] and Ukraine."
• "was awarded gold in" → "was awarded gold certifications in"
• "also received platinum" → "also received a platinum" and mention when this one was, as it's the most notable certification

Music video

• Img looks good!
• "After being signed to the label," → "After she was signed to the label,"
• Remove word official from the second sentence because that is implied after the previous one
• The clip being filmed during winter season is not sourced
• "dressed up in a" → "dressed in a"

Live performances and other usage

• Remove pipe on Top Music Awards
• "In June 2016, the singer provided live performances at the Top Music Awards in Tirana," → "In 2016, the singer provided live performances at the Top Music Awards in June,"
• "in July 2016,[55] the" → "in July and the" moving [55] solely to the end of the sentence
• "in September 2016,[56] and the" → "in September.[56] She later performed the song at the"
• Shouldn't the Skopje Calling Festival performance be mentioned alongside Top Music Awards per them both being in June?
• Mention when she performed the song on those shows
• "in 2016, and on" → "in 2016 and in"
• "a performance of the recording" → "performances of the recording"

Credits and personnel

• Pipe Cricket to Cricket (producer)

Track listing

• Good

Charts

Weekly charts

• TopHit → Tophit
• None of the Slovakia positions are loading on the website

Year-end charts

• Pipe PROPHON to International Federation of the Phonographic Industry

Certifications

• Good

Release history

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks incredible at 4.8%!!!
• Wikilink Top Channel on ref 2 instead of ref 27
• Remove United States from ref 3's title and add the appropriate citation(s) to back up a various release

There are unfortunately no other available sources regarding the first version released in December 2015, I changed the region only for the US Iaof2017 (talk) 16:17, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

• What exactly makes ref 4 a reliable source?

Source moved to "Promotion..." section, there are no other citation regarding the music video location Iaof2017 (talk) 16:17, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

• Pipe MTV to MTV (British and Irish TV channel) on ref 9
• Cite Billboard as work/website instead on refs 11 and 84, only wikilinking on the former
• Independent → The Independent on ref 12
• Cite Vice as work/website instead on ref 14
• Wikilink Telegrafi on ref 17
• WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on ref 28
• TopHit → Tophit on refs 34, 43, 75, 78 and 80
• Can you find source(s) working to replace refs 41 and 71?

I couldn't find anything, the selected period is not displayed on the official website and was even not archived anywhere Iaof2017 (talk) 16:17, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

• Cite YouTube in the via parameter for ref 51, while adding Nesër as publisher
• Do the same via parameter for ref 52 as above and cite Ultra Music as publisher
• Ref 62 should cite Telegrafi as work/website instead
• WP:OVERLINK of Apple Music on ref 66
• Pipe PROPHON to International Federation of the Phonographic Industry on ref 74

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; that took slightly longer than most of your noms! --K. Peake 08:59, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

Hi Kyle Peake. I solved your comments except for that one where I left a response. PS: I merged the "Music video" and "Live performances and other usage" sections. Iaof2017 (talk) 16:12, 13 April 2022 (UTC)

Iaof2017 The prose still says various countries for the citation that only backs up the United States, fix this. --K. Peake 16:50, 14 April 2022 (UTC)

Kyle Peake done. :) Iaof2017 (talk) 17:29, 14 April 2022 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, solid job yet again! --K. Peake 19:55, 14 April 2022 (UTC)