Talk:Bobby Pulido/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by AJona1992 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 06:06, 25 June 2016 (UTC)Reply


Infobox

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  • The black–and–white photo of Bobby Pulido requires an alt description, so please add one
  •   Done
  • Just for stylistic purposes, I'd add the appropriate amount of spaces into the "embed" parameter as the rest of parameters
  •   Done

Lead

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Paragraph 2

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  • "Pulido debuted on the music scene in 1995 as the lead vocalist of his eponymous band, and the same year he signed a recording contract with EMI Latin and released his debut album, Desvelado." --> Use of "and" twice in the same sentence
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Paragraph 3

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  • Why does Enséñame redirect to the album article for Rebelde? Wrong link
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  • Slight suggestion: "By 2000, the popularity of Tejano music was declining; Pulido's subsequent albums failed to chart anywhere." --> "By 2000, the popularity of Tejano music was declining, resulting in Pulido's subsequent albums to not chart anywhere."
  •   Done

Life and career

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1971–94: Early life and career beginnings

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  • Nada! Great job!! :)
  • Thank you =)

1995–99: Debut album and commercial success

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  • Again, please unlink Enséñame as it redirects to the album article for Rebelde?
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  • Slight suggestion: "Enséñame peaked at number ten on the U.S. Billboard Top Latin Albums and number two on the U.S. Billboard Regional Mexican Albums chart.[17]" --> Perhaps you could add a statement before this stating that the album was commercially successful in the US?
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2000–09: Professional struggles, acting debut, and hiatus

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  • Slight suggestion: "2000–09: Professional struggles, acting debut, and hiatus" --> "2000–09: Decline in popularity, acting debut, and hiatus"
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  • "In March 2000, he released Zona de Peligro, which was less successful than his previous albums; it peaked at number 48 on the Top Latin Albums chart.[33]" --> "In March 2000, he released Zona de Peligro, which was less successful than his previous albums, peaking at number 48 on the Top Latin Albums chart.[33]"
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  • "Pulido released his sixth studio album Siempre Pensando En Ti in March 2001, it fared less well commercially, peaking at number 50 on the Top Latin Albums chart.[36]" --> "Pulido released his sixth studio album Siempre Pensando En Ti in March 2001; it fared less well commercially, peaking at number 50 on the Top Latin Albums chart.[36]"
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  • Why does Bobby link to the album article for Bobby Brown?
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2010–present: Return to music and acting

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  • Great work! Nothing to add here!
  • Thank you =)

Personal life

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Paragraph 1

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  • "Pulido asked Anzaldua for a divorce in September 2013, after 17 years of being married and four months of separation.[49]" --> I think this reads awkwardly; could it be something along the lines of "However, Pulido filed for divorce in September 2013, after 17 years of being married and four months of separation.[49]" ? What do you think?
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Discography

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  • I think you're missing Desvelado here; and then remember to link Desvelado in addition
  •   Done

Filmography

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  • Fantastic job!

End of GA Review:

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On hold for seven days. Great work and good luck! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 02:29, 26 June 2016 (UTC).Reply

  • @Carbrera: I have fixed all issues. Thanks again for your review, – jona 12:33, 26 June 2016 (UTC)Reply