Talk:Bo Burnham: Inside/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Bilorv in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 02:34, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 02:34, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead edit
- Infobox looks good (but I think Josh Senior might need a source).
- "about his day-to-day life indoors [...] taking photos for Instagram" (was that song about him?)
- Looks good. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 17:48, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
- In the second lead paragraph, add a WP:DATECOMMA after May 30, 2021.
- Serial comma after "stand-up comedy".
Background edit
- "Burnham begun to have" → "Burnham began to have"
- Make a WP:CITEBUNDLE with the four sources after "Make Happy (2016)"
- Link panic attacks in #Background and remove the link in #Synopsis.
- "in [his] guest house, in his home in Los Angeles" sounds like two places. Reword.
- Is it better as
filmed in Burnham's guest house, inside his Los Angeles home
? — Bilorv (talk) 16:48, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
- Is it better as
- Yes. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 17:48, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
Synopsis and album edit
- This section is 693 words so that passes WP:FILMPLOT.
- The second sentence repeats "the special" twice. Reword to avoid wordiness.
- Remove the comma after "he does not want to finish the special".
- #Album looks good but the track listing needs a source.
Analysis edit
- "analysed" → "analyzed" (American English for all uses)
- "and the subsequent reaction video is" → "and the subsequent reaction video are"
- Yes that works. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 17:49, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
- Change "(1995–8)" to "(1995–1998)" per MOS:YEARRANGE.
- Change uses of "..." to "[...]" (more visually appealing).
- My understanding of MOS:ELLIPSIS is that this is only preferred when there is ambiguity over whether the ellipsis is in-quote or added by us. — Bilorv (talk) 16:48, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
- Link claustrophobia here and remove the link in #Reception.
Reception and references edit
- Updated Rotten Tomatoes.
- Paraphrase – WP:RECEPTION.
- Archive sources.
- #5 (The Gazette) is dead.
- Mark Rolling Stone w/ "|url-access=limited".
Progress edit
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