Talk:Blood Harmony/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:30, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Oldest album GAN right now; appropriate for me to review now since I removed this nom originally when you had retired! --K. Peake 08:30, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good!
• "by his own label OYOY, through AWAL," → "by his record label OYOY, distributed by AWAL," with the wikilink
• Release date is not mentioned anywhere in the body; probably write out in the third section
• "record. The EP was a commercial underperformance," → "record that commercial underperformed," to avoid having such a short sentence
• "The EP's lead single," → "The lead single," with the wikilink
• "and Rock Airplay charts." → "and Rock Airplay charts, respectively."
• "support of the release." → "support of the EP."
• "on August 7, 2020 featuring" → "on August 7, 2020, featuring"
• Target single to Single (music)

•  Not done, already wikilinked in the first sentence of the second para. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 05:19, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

• My bad, must have missed that. --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

• Remove comma before entitled

Background

• "Finneas teased the EP" → "Finneas teased Blood Harmony"
• "The EP marks" → "The EP marked"
• "speaks for itself."" → "speaks for itself"." per MOS:QUOTE
• "He also said" → "Finneas also said,"
• I take issue with the second sentence of the quote, as that is practically all repeating what was said before so remove it but keep the first sentence.

Composition

• Retitle to Composition and lyrics
• Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
• "It features minimalist" → "The song features minimalist production"
• "an aggressive beat and" → "an aggressive beat, and"
• [8][6] should be put in numerical order
• Add comma after "Shelter"
• Add mention of the song's tropical beat

•  Not done --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

• Target Latin to Latin music
• Target gospel to Gospel music
• Wikilink bluesy
• "vocal embellishment and" → "vocal embellishment, and"
• "with elements of" → "has elements of"

•  Not done for some reason this has been removed --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

I removed it because of The Heights sources mentioned it had elements of pop. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:55, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

• "sees Finneas sing" → "It sees Finneas sing"
• "and gets angry when the past gets" → "while getting angry when the past seemingly blends"
• "and finds comfort by dreaming that they can be together in" → "but finds comfort by dreaming about being together with her in"
• Remove target on ballad
• "and are almost entirely" → "with it being almost entirely"
• Change entitled to titled to be less repetitive with the lead
• "has noted the influence of" → "noted the influence of"
• [28][5] put in numerical order

Promotion

• Retitle to Release and promotion; remove the sub-section for singles and add the album's release as the first sentence
• The source only backs up the song's release in Australia; either add more citations, a different one or reword accordingly
• You forgot to add Canada after "in"
• Wikilink music video
• "directed by Sam Bennett and choreographed" → "directed by Sam Bennett, while choreographed"
• Target single to Single (music)
• Same issue with the second single as the one I mentioned earlier in this section
• "It received a remix" → "The song received a remix"
• Add a comma after "Shelter"
• "on September 30, 2019." → "and released on September 30, 2019."

 Not done, already mentions that it is the four and final single. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 05:19, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Damn, my bad here again. --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Live performances

• "Finneas toured throughout the" → "He toured throughout the"
• "In October of the same year," → "That same month,"
• Remove the word setlist since there is no setlist mentioned, just the tracks on the album
• Add speech mark to end the title "I Don't Miss You at All"

Reception

• Remove the opening sentence, as three reviews is not enough to back a critical overview up
• "writing for NME gave the EP 4 out of 5 stars, saying the songs" → "writing for NME, said the songs" since the rating is in the box
• "and has an" → "and have an"

•  Not done

• "modern production tweaks."" → "modern production tweaks"." per MOS:QUOTE
• "Writing for Billboard, Glenn Rowley" → "For Billboard, Glenn Rowley"
• "of human emotion."" → "of human emotion"."

•  Not done

• "was the "most" → "is the "most"
• "of Finneas' career."" → "of Finneas' career"."
• "She continued saying" → "She continued, saying"
• "and production triumph."" → "and production triumph"."

Track listing

• Good

Charts

• See MOS:TABLECAPTION

References

• Copyvio score is somewhat high at 46.5%, but that is mostly due to title so this isn't really offensive
• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
• Cite middlename directly after the first for ref 9
• Wikilink Earmilk on ref 12
• Remove or replace ref 15 per WP:RSSM
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 17
• Regarding ref 29, if you wish to add various citations, see what you have done in the past
• iTunes → Apple Music (DE) on ref 36 and the above comment may apply
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 45

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but make sure you go through properly to avoid missing things like you did the last few times! --K. Peake 12:03, 26 January 2021 (UTC)

Kyle Peake Thanks for the review. All of your concerns should be completed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 05:29, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

The Ultimate Boss You missed a few, which I went over above. --K. Peake 06:08, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Kyle Peake Jesus Christ. I'm so stupid. I have fixed them now... The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:56, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

The Ultimate Boss ✓ Pass now, and advice for next time would be to go through the comments more than once to check everything is done. --K. Peake 07:23, 27 January 2021 (UTC)