Talk:Bionicle: Mask of Light/to do
Latest comment: 14 years ago by Twilight Helryx
- I think it has the makings of a good article, as it has a good use of inline citations and a decent structure, but I found it unbalanced and not comprehensive.
- copyediting for style ("he's too much of a wimp" for example, doesn't have a very encylopedic tone).
- The plot section is far too long - it should be a summary, not a blow-by-blow account of every scene.
- Comment: I've cut out a lot of the unnecessary parts. However, it is still too long; also, it may be a bit difficult to pick out what's an excess detail and what's a necessary one. I'm still working out a way to fix that but if anyone else already knows how, please go right ahead.--Twilight Helryx 19:36, 1 December 2009 (UTC)
- It needs a section on the characters. This is currently interwoven with the plot section and makes it difficult to read as well as increasing its length still further
- The production section covers immediate pre-production only. It needs information on earlier pre-production, production and post-production.
- I assume the film is CG animation, but the only clue is in the accompanying images.
- Some of the information is disconnected, assuming a familiarity with the subject:For the design, Shakespeare noted that "The first film had primary colors that were coded to the areas and a younger feel.". Coded to the areas? What does that mean?