Talk:Bilbo Baggins/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Chiswick Chap in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: JavaHurricane (talk · contribs) 08:06, 19 May 2020 (UTC)Reply


I'll be happy to review Bilbo's entry. JavaHurricane 08:06, 19 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:33, 19 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
Chiswick Chap, no problems! JavaHurricane 08:39, 19 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
I'm currently actively reviewing. JavaHurricane 06:47, 24 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Status edit

  Good article

Criteria edit

  • Well-written:
  • Broad in its coverage:
  • it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style): 
  • Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each: 
  • Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute: 

Comments edit

  • I'd appreciate an expansion of the first paragraph of the lead - one sentence is not enough for so important a character.
Done.
  • Also, I think the paragraph about his role in The Hobbit could be expanded.
Done.
  • "The Lord of the Rings, begins [...]" - remove excess comma.
Gone.
  • The link to Lotho in the family tree redirects to "The Shire" and should be excised.
Gone.
  • "Throughout the 2003 video game The Hobbit the players control Bilbo," - comma should be added after "The Hobbit".
Added.
  • Ref 13 to Appendix C should be a primary source and not secondary.
Fixed.

Otherwise, an excellent article! On hold till all the above issues are fixed. JavaHurricane 07:34, 24 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

JavaHurricane: I believe I've attended to all of them. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:39, 27 May 2020 (UTC)Reply