DYK- Did you know that this form of religion uses a psychadelic drug as a apart of their religious process? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Noaya97 (talk • contribs)
- Noaya97, you didn't sign this so I didn't get the ping. OK--but it needs rewriting: "this form of religion" is vague and you need to name it, and you need to run spellcheck as well. And why not identify the drug? Dr Aaij (talk) 18:16, 2 May 2017 (UTC)Reply
- I think in its current state the article would be turned down. It needs copyediting ("peyotism" in multiple places); it is unclear what the lead is unclear--those first three paragraphs are just too long and unorganized; the dates are a bit mixed (1880s? 1890?); the whole article needs a grammar check. Also, per DYK requirements, every single paragraph needs to be cited, and have a footnote at the end of it. Let me know how it goes. Dr Aaij (talk) 18:19, 2 May 2017 (UTC)Reply
- Article uses inconsistent dating. States in the beginning that it began in the 1880s, and then states "1890". Consistent use of the more general, and likely more accurate "1880s" is recommended. Article cites a Quapaw man requesting Moonhead to bring the ceremony to the area, but then inconsistently claims it was requested by an Osage, which is not consistent or factual. The statement "no tribe converted the Osage" is very unclear and inconsistent with the rest of the article. The statement that the "Osage are the only current practitioners" is not accurate. The statement about Black Dog doesn't make sense. The statement that the Osage were the "most significant converts" is difficult to substantiate, especially as all of the following supporting sentences in the section reference the actions of individuals from the Quapaw and Caddo Tribes. Recommend using the wording like "The Osage were significant converts".
Ogahpah (talk) 14:49, 21 September 2018 (UTC)Reply
