Talk:Besarion Jughashvili/GA1
Latest comment: 5 years ago by Jens Lallensack in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 07:57, 22 December 2018 (UTC)
Reviewing now:
- Montefiore writes – it would be good to introduce these and other authors with one word, e.g., "Historian Montefiore". Helps the reader.
- I have noted who Monntefiore is in the "Family background and early life section" ("...with historian Simon Sebag Montefiore suggesting..."). Would that not be sufficient here?
- the Georgian custom to partially pay for business with wine – I don't understand this, so not sure if it could be formulated more clearly?
- Re-worded, hope that is better.
- in January, 1900 Ioseb was arrested for the first time, on account of Jughashvili. When Jughashvili left Didi Lilo he was not removed from the village roles, so still owed taxes as a peasant from the region. – so he was arrested because his father owed taxes and a peasant from the region? Would it be possible to add why this was a crime?
- Unfortunately there isn't any clarification in any of the sources regarding this, except that he was arrested.
- everything else looks very good. Did a slight copy edit. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 07:57, 22 December 2018 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay, been away for a few days. Addressed things here, let me know what you think. Kaiser matias (talk) 23:04, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
- Great, thank you very much. Passing now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 08:21, 25 December 2018 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay, been away for a few days. Addressed things here, let me know what you think. Kaiser matias (talk) 23:04, 24 December 2018 (UTC)