Talk:Ben Linus/GA1

GA Review

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   In the lead "Locke eventually replaces Ben as the leader, forcing Ben to leave the Island", it sounds like Locke intentionally "forced" Ben from his leadership, while Ben (let's say) "resigned" from this position. It's a bit hard to put but I hope you get what I mean.
   The "Prior to the crash" section says nothing about the fence around the Dharma camp. You don't have to tell all about it, but you can say that Ben "escaped" from the Dharma camp and accidently met Richard Alpert, because you say he approached Richard, while didn't know what was going to happen when he crossed the line between the Dharma and the "hostile" camp.
   I think this is just me, but did the others kidnap Alex before he killed everybody at Dharma, because I can hardly remembered that being said in any episode.
   It is said in "There's No Place Like Home" that Locke is discovered three years in the future, so you can replace "years later" (which sounds kinda vague) with "Three years after Ben leaving the island...".

   B. MoS compliance:

   I noticed that some of the dates in the references are linked and it would be best if they were unliked, per here.
   In the "After the Crash" section, "After they escape Ben's operation is finished" needs a comma behind escape, or it sounds like they escape Ben's operation.
   In the "reception" section, there's no need for "TV Squad" to be italicized since it is a website.
   In some of the references the date is referred to as (for instance) "February 22, 2008" while in other references it is referenced to as "2008-02-22", whichever you want, please stay precistent.
   in the "reception" section, SyFy Portal and E! can be linked. E! can also be italicized since it is a magazine.
   In the "awards section" "Damages", "Dexter", "Heroes" and "Ugly Betty" can all be italicized since they are TV shows.

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

   Lead: "His fantastic performance." that's not neutral, if the producers or writers said it, please place it in quotation marks, however it would still require a reference, because it's not stated anywhere else in the article. I'd advice you just to delete it.

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

   seems fine.

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   The article is a nice read, with only the above issues (which aren't really obvious), if you can adress these issues, I'll pass the article. Good luck!--Music26/11 16:06, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Okay I think I've fixed all of that except for a couple of things. I could reword the stuff about when Alex was captured, she was captured 16 years before the crash, 1988, and the purge was in 1992 because Horace said 12 years ago in Cabin Fever I think. The other thing is I don't really understand what you mean by mentioning the sonic barrier when meeting Richard for the first time, could you explain that further please? Sanders11 (talk) 22:01, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

What I mean is that Ben wasn't planning on meeting Richard when he crossed the barrier, and when you say that he encountered Richard it sounds like he already knew what was going to happen. Do you get it (I'm always a bit vague). Also, could you move the image of Ben arriving on the island to the right per MOS:IMAGE. Furthermore, the article looks good, good work.--Music26/11 11:39, 30 November 2008 (UTC)

I've reworded it a bit, is that any better? Sanders11 (talk) 12:19, 30 November 2008 (UTC)

Yep, it's more clear now, GA pass.--Music26/11 12:57, 30 November 2008 (UTC)

Thank you! Sanders11 (talk) 15:22, 30 November 2008 (UTC)