Talk:Becoming Jane/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grapple X (talk · contribs) 01:28, 4 August 2012 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

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Anne Hathaway. Annehathawayannehathawayannehathawayannehathawayannehathawayannehathaway....

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   In the infobox, stick a space between "112 min." and the opening bracket after it.
   In the lead, I would take "together" out of that second quote and just include it before the quotation mark; I think the flow of quotes can be a bit odd when they begin halfway through an aphorism like that.
   " it had better preserved locations than Hampshire" -> unless you mean that its preserved locations were better than the preserved locations in Hampshire (both were preserved, the Irish ones maybe had better accessibility/affordability/tea?), then hyphenate "better-preserved" to indicate that the locations were in preserved in better condition.
   "Hathaway received mixed critical reception" -> I'd phrase this to focus on her performance, as I'm sure they didn't think she was a terrible person.
   "peers of that era" -> His contemporaries in the field, or those with peerages?
   "The actress called her character "terribly sensible [who] gets her heart broken..." -> I think this needs a bit of reworking, as is it seems like a fragment. Perhaps "The actress called her character "terribly sensible", noting that she "gets her heart broken..."; then continuing on.
   "Mhaoldhomhnaigh attended the Cannes Film Festival in May 2006" -> "Ní" is actually part of her surname too, it's the feminine form of "O'" (like in "O'Shaughnessy").
   The link in "empire waistline" is a redirect; although it's not technically wrong to include them I can't see this particular one being spun out from the target article at any point so perhaps a pipe ([[empire silhouette|empire waistline]]) would be better here.
   "€12.7 million (£9 million or 6.5 million)" -> I'm not sure what the "or 6.5 million" here means, is it missing a currency sign or is this meant to be an approximate range (6.5 to 9 mil)?
   Spell out ADR when you mention it. It's a jargony term that cinéastes will know but not necessarily anyone else.
   "It ultimately grossed £3.78 million in the UK and Ireland, placing in sixteenth among all UK films in those markets." -> On what time scale? 16th ever, year-end, that week?
   " It earned the highest grosses in the US, the UK, and Australia." -> "its highest grosses"; as is the sentence reads like it was the top-grossing film in those countries.
   "Critics lauded Hathaway and McAvoy for the chemistry between their characters, lending authenticity to the love story between Austen and Lefroy." -> this implies the critical praise gave the love story authenticity, perhaps change "lending" to "finding that it lent".
   Does the blu-ray contain the listed extras too?
   Not directly related but I've got to the bottom of the article and noticed it—you might want to add an image for the Austen portal by creating a subpage of Template:Portal/Images (Template:Portal/Images/Jane Austen).

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

   Fine.

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

   Fine, but ref 24 is missing a space before the subscription template.

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

   Grand.

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

   Grand.

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

   Grand.

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

   Wondering how useful File:Austen women in cricket.jpg is. Here, for example, is a CC2.0 image of Hathaway's dress; the lack of variety I see being compensated for by the increased resolution a free file offers. Other than that the images are fine.

   • Nice find! I have no problem with uploading that image. Before I do so, is {{tl|cc-by-2.0}} what you meant, or should I use a different license? I've never uploaded something like this particular image before and don't want to mess it up somehow. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 02:33, 4 August 2012 (UTC)

   • That's the one indeed. Just remember to give due credit to the creator when it's uploaded. GRAPPLE X 02:37, 4 August 2012 (UTC)

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   In good shape already, just a few tweaks to be made. I don't know why I keep reviewing these. Work on something with more blood and guts please. :P GRAPPLE X 01:28, 4 August 2012 (UTC)

Reading of your despair of anything Austen always brings a smile to my face. Sorry, not a blood and guts kind of girl, though I am fond of anything Tarantino... I'll start working on the article shortly. Ruby 2010/2013 02:33, 4 August 2012 (UTC)

All done! Let me know if there are any outstanding issues with the image I uploaded to commons. Thanks again for reviewing an article that I know was difficult for you. ;) Ruby 2010/2013 03:25, 4 August 2012 (UTC)

Happy days, passed. This one wasn't that hard, Anne Hathaway helps things. But just remember, I bombed the same Romanticism course twice at uni. Then why'd you take it twice, Grapple? Shut up, Grapple. GRAPPLE X 03:36, 4 August 2012 (UTC)