Talk:Battle of Marshall's Elm/GA1
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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 20:12, 26 November 2019 (UTC)
I'll have a look at this one. It may take me a couple of days to get to it. An odd question: As I assume that this is headed straight for at least ACR, would you like me to do a "straight" assessment against the GAN criteria? Or give it the works and check over everything as if it were at FAC? Gog the Mild (talk) 20:12, 26 November 2019 (UTC)
- I'm always happy for the most critical review possible, so be as picky as you like. All I would say, given how busy I am at the moment particularly, is that if there is anything non-essential for GA that is likely to be time-consuming, could you mark it as such? Harrias talk 22:02, 26 November 2019 (UTC)
I have done a little copy editing, which you will want to check.
- "Facing musket fire from the hidden dragoons, and being charged at by the Royalist cavalry, they were routed." Nothing wrong with this for GAN, but is perhaps a little clunky for FAC.
- Not an issue for GAN.
- Consider linking militia.
- "and was central within the area" Central has several meanings. Would it be possible to briefly indicate which one you mean?
- "and the strong Parliamentarian views held by those nearby" Those what nearby? 'and the strong Parliamentarian views held by the majority of Somerset's rural populus' or similar perhaps?
- "a role in which he had been amongst those responsible for training and leading the county's militia" I am not sure that is grammatical.
- Better.
- "Parliament" or "parliament"?
- Suggest inserting sigfig=1 into your convert templates.
- I think that it's Parliament too. But I am not sure enough of my ground to argue over it, so simply ask for consistency.
- "while Captain Sands brought a further from South Petherton" Something missing?
- "Pyne had orders to bring the troops to rendezvous with Strode in Street." 'a rendezvous'?
- Yes it's the bringing "the troops" to rendexvous that doesn't work. 'Pyne had orders to rendezvous with Strode in Street.' is fine. Pyne had orders to bring the troops to a rendezvous with Strode in Street.' is fine. The mix you have isn't. IMO
- "just south of Street" It would be helpful if "just" could be quantified. (1½ miles?)
- "the Royalists had the advantage of coming down off the Poldens" How or why is that an advantage. (I assume that you mean militarily?)
- It's fine for GAN. I may, or may not, want to poke at it at ACR.
- " On top of the seven killed at the battle" " On top of" → 'In addition to'?
- "Despite their defeat at Marshall's Elm, the Parliamentarians were gathering more men around Wells" This doesn't really flow. Maybe something like 'the Parliamentarians continued to gather men around Wells'?
- A couple of your "p."s should be 'pp.'
- Edgar: I don't think that there were ISBNs in 1968.
- Fine, as you say. I didn't check, just assumed. Live and learn. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:18, 27 November 2019 (UTC)
- Map caption: Perhaps 'Location of Marshal's Elm within Somerset'? or '... of the battle'?
Nice one. I enjoyed that. Gog the Mild (talk) 21:08, 27 November 2019 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review. I've responded to each point above; mostly in agreement, sometimes with a query, and sometimes a combination of the two. Just the Siege of Sherborne Castle to do, and then this little piece of the Civil War is wrapped up. Harrias talk 10:14, 28 November 2019 (UTC)
- You seem to have covered everything, so I am promoting. Looking forward to seeing your next project. Gog the Mild (talk) 12:31, 28 November 2019 (UTC)
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