Talk:Battle of Kostiuchnówka/GA1
GA Review edit
I'm going to take over this review. I've read the article, and here are some areas that I think need improvement:
- Per WP:LEAD, for an article this size, the lead should be one or two paragraphs only. I'd merge that last sentence into the last paragraph.
- Image:Pilsudski in Kostiuchnówka's trenches.jpg is fair-use. It needs to be scaled down, as it is currently not low resolution. It also needs a detailed fair-use rationale using Template:Non-free use rationale.
- In some parts of the article, dates are formatted day month (6 June) and in others, month day (July 4).
- The battle is considered the largest and most vicious of those involving the Polish Legions in World War I. - who says this? It sounds weasel-ly unless you tribute this comment to a source in the text. Such as According to (person/book), the battle... or (Person/book) considers the battle...
- serving as one of his primary tools for restoring Polish independence. - primary? cite it or it is original research
- Autumn saw heavy fighting - can autumn see? --> There was heavy fighting in autumn - this happens a couple of time in the article
- but this would change drastically with the launching - be concise --> but this changed drastically with the launching
- Add between numbers and units. See WP:NBSP for more info.
- of those days - sounds too colloquial; can it be reworded?
- would be stopped --> was stopped
- excellent performance - WP:PEACOCK; the sentence still makes sense if the word excellent is left out
- he would be arrested --> he was arrested
- What kind of restoration has taken place on the monuments?
- The casualties are mentioned in the lead, but not in the text. I think it should be mentioned - maybe in the beginning of the aftermath?
- Why are there no casualties reported for the Russian Empire? Does nobody have at least some kind of estimate?
- Further reading should be above external links
- There are some comma problems, but I'll fix those when everything else is finished.
That's about it. I'll look through the article again after some progress is made. The article will be on hold for seven days for improvements. Good luck! Nikki311 06:17, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
- Just to avoid confusion...the seven day holding period will start on Monday when you get a chance to look through my suggestions. Nikki311 18:06, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
- To avoid confusion - I got a chance to look over them just now :) The image in question is already scaled down. Please don't hesitate to improve English language, I am not a native speaker. I will try to address/fix the content issues soon.--Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk 20:50, 4 June 2008 (UTC)
I think that with help of Greg (thanks) most of the above issues have been addressed. Regarding restoration: they started in 1998 and are mostly done by Polish Boy Scouts who visit Ukraine every year. They have found and restored the cemetery in Polski Lasek, but not the one at Polska Góra; they have rebuld the six obelisks in various places (the text is not clear if any of them was at Kostiuchnówka).--Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk 10:06, 7 June 2008 (UTC)