Talk:Battle of Helena/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 15:36, 15 September 2022 (UTC)

• After teasing you with several edits (and out of nostalgia for a birthplace I haven't been in nearly two decades) I will take this one up. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 15:36, 15 September 2022 (UTC)

Criteria

GA Criteria
GA Criteria: 1 1.a Y 1.b Y 2 2.a Y 2.b Y 2.c Y 2.d Y 3 3.a Y 3.b Y 4 4.a Y 5 5.a Y 6 6.a Y 6.b Y

• No DAB links Y
• No dead links Y
• No missing citations Y

Discussion

Prose Suggestions

Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

• The Battle of Helena was a battle of the American Civil War fought on July 4, 1863, in Helena, Arkansas. suggest The Battle of Helena was a fought on July 4, 1863, in Helena, Arkansas, as a part of the American Civil War
  • Done
• Later in the year, Union troops used Helena as a jumping-off point for their successful campaign to capture Little Rock, Arkansas. suggest Later in the year, Union troops used Helena as a staging ground for their successful campaign to capture Little Rock, Arkansas.
  • Done

Background

• Slavery was a key issue. this bit here is pretty awkward, suggest either rewriting to In December 1860, the state of South Carolina seceded, as a result of a number of disagreemnts with the federal government, slavery chief among them, or something similar.
  • Done
• (the United States was known during the war as the Union), suggest moving this to be an efn after the first mention of Union (currently Beginning in late April, Union forces
  • Instead of footnoting this, I've shortened and moved the mention

Prelude

• The three officers formed a plan to concentrate Confederate forces against Helena, somewhat awkward with the usage of the three generals at the end of the previous sentence, suggest There they formed a plan to concentrate Confederate forces against Helena
• Done

Battle

• finding that the Union guns could not be turned on the Confederates, this seems to be miswritten, unless I'm failing to understand; "turn on" would make it seem as if they were attempting to fire upon the Confederates... i.e. themselves. Perhaps finding that the Union guns could not be used,
  • Done
• believing a general attack was in the works suggest believing a general attack was in progress
  • Went with "was beginning"

Aftermath

• with Helena as the jumping-off point. suggest with Helena as the staging ground.
  • Done
• @Hog Farm: That is all of my suggestions. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 17:30, 15 September 2022 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.