Talk:Battle of Dibrivka/GA1

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Augustios Paleo in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Augustios Paleo (talk · contribs) 17:51, 1 August 2023 (UTC)Reply


Prose & other

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  • The flag for the Imperial German Army in the box is wrong, the one used here is the naval ensign
 
This one AFH (talk) 13:17, 2 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 14:13, 2 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • This page desperately needs images. A map of the region with troop movements or just the political situation in general could be very useful due to this complicated topic.
  • Expand the prose, include things like: planning, who was involved, why did it happen
Include AFH (talk) 13:21, 2 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Background

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  • "During the conflict, Ukrainian anarchists had sided with the Soviets,[4] but following the Treaty of Brest-Litovsk, in which the Central Powers were invited to invade Ukraine,[5] the anarchists were forced to retreat to Russia, where they regrouped in Taganrog and planned to launch a war of independence against the occupying powers.[6]" Break up this sentence
  • "the newly established Ukrainian State.[7]" include how this state was a puppet or occupation government of the Central Powers, as it would give more context.
That sounds good AFH (talk) 13:16, 2 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • "They then withdrew north to Pokrovske, where they launched another surprise attack against the Austrians and briefly captured the town from the occupying powers.[9]" The use of they is redundant, maybe say "The anarchists then withdrew north to Pokrovske... and liberated the town from the occupying powers".
  • Changed first instance of "They" to "The anarchists", but I left the second part of the sentence as saying "captured" rather than "liberated", as the occupation forces later returned to Pokrovske. In my view, "liberation" implies the occupying forces don't return. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Battle

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  • change to Battle and planning, as much of this section covers the plans
  • "They selected 30 men to carry out the attack, which was to take place during the day, while the Austrians were resting.[16]" Outline who they is: Shchus and Makhno
  • "Others turned and fled in a panic.[17] Fleeing towards Pokrovske, the Austrians were pursued and captured by the local peasantry," use other words besides "flee"

Aftermath

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  • You mention several towns and areas, a map of this situation would really improve this article and is necessary for Good Article. If needed, you can probably request one.
Wikipedia:Graphics Lab/Map workshop, here, sorry I meant to post this. If not this then WP: Military History might have something like it. AFH (talk) 13:15, 2 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
  • The word "insurgents" is repetitive in the second paragraph, words like "rebels", "anarchists", etc. could be used
  • Overall, well written on an often overlooked war. Happy to see what you write next.
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