Talk:Battle of Chach
Latest comment: 1 year ago by TrangaBellam in topic Making a point etc.
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Making a point etc. edit
A huge allied army, composed of the Hindu Shahis and allied Rajas [..]
is meaningless phrasing.
Trilochanapala failed to prevent Mahmud's troops from crossing across the Indus, who then set out for the plains of [..]
- Who refers to - Trilochanapala or Mahmud's troops? A reader has to pause for at-least a mini-second to assess whatever the line is trying to convey.
I can go on .... TrangaBellam (talk) 10:06, 20 May 2022 (UTC)
- No, it's quite clear, and the second sentence clearly implies that this is about Mahmud. पाटलिपुत्र Pat (talk) 10:10, 20 May 2022 (UTC)
- And what is this obsession with adjectives? "Relentless", "ultimately" etc.? TrangaBellam (talk) 10:11, 20 May 2022 (UTC)