Talk:Battle of Andrassos/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Cplakidas in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Auntieruth55 (talk · contribs) 16:26, 24 January 2017 (UTC)Reply


  • dabs ok. links, almost One, Hebraeus, shows as forbidden....
  • could you read it through again and polish up some of the writing?
  • Coming after a series of costly defeats in the previous years, this battle broke the power of the Hamdanid emirate for good.
following a series of defeats in the previous year, this battle finally broke the power of the Hamdanid emirate.
  • ...elated at the success of his raid and full of self-confidence, was riding on his horse, a mare "of extraordinary size an speed", speeding alongside his troops
the elated Sayd... sped alongside his troops on his mare "of extraordinary size and speed"....
Hi Auntieruth, thanks for taking the time with this. I've tried to polish up on the prose somewhat (and included a map!), but a fresh pair of eyes might be better. If you want to suggest any particular problematic spots, or do a copyedit yourself, I'd be grateful. Thanks, Constantine 17:21, 4 February 2017 (UTC)Reply
Looks good, thanks a lot for the improvements! Constantine 18:46, 6 February 2017 (UTC)Reply