Talk:Batavi (military unit)

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Jen Johnson in topic Untitled

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Article Review by Jennifer Harreld • I think the introduction needs more, maybe a quick abstract of the details that are to come in the rest of the article • In the history section I think there should be more information about the Battle of Strasbourg, tell of its importance. • I really like the photos, especially the re-enactment one, maybe there could be a section at the end that could tell about the people who still live this history and the importance to them. • In the Batavi seniores and iuniores section, you may have some grammar corrects needed. You said, Valentinian put the shame on the batavi. I’m not sure if the shame? Is correct also you said to strip them of their arms and to sold them as runaway slaves. This too needs some grammar corrections, nothing horrible though. • I’d like to know more about the Great Conspiracy! • I love the quote! Authentic!! • My favorite thing about this article is your use of pictures, especially the maps. There are enough to broaden the ideas of the reader, like if he was using this to help spark ideas of interest he would be able to see the maps to create a nice understanding of the area. • I though the end of the article was the best. I do think the beginning needs some work, but the end of this article seemed to be written better and was very interesting. • I really like your topic and I really do think you did a fabulous job! ToothFairyJenny (talk) 06:00, 18 November 2013 (UTC)Reply

I think it might be helpful to give a brief explanation go who the Batavi people were as mentioned in the first paragraph. I know you linked to it, but it could be beneficial to have an explanation on this page as well. Also, the only other thing I really want to suggest is the use of italics when mentioning Batavi. Sometimes you italicize it and other times you don't. It gets kind of confusing and it could be a little bit difficult to differentiate whether or not you are talking about the military unit or the people. Other than that it looks good! Jen Johnson (talk) 22:43, 18 November 2013 (UTC)Reply