GA Review edit

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Reviewer: 100cellsman (talk · contribs) 06:19, 9 May 2019 (UTC)Reply

Seems like a short and promising article. I'll be happy to review it soon. 100cellsman (talk) 06:19, 9 May 2019 (UTC)Reply

I am! I just haven't gotten around to it yet. 100cellsman (talk) 17:52, 15 May 2019 (UTC)Reply

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So NicHT495, I'm pretty satisfied with the article, though I will fix some minor issues that wouldn't be worth putting into words.

I just have a few pointers:

  • It's usually advised not to place inline citations in the lead unless controversial claims are being made in it.
  • I recommend incorporating the origin of their band name in the history section. Just after it states that the group was formed in 2009.
  • "The band claimed" change "Claimed" to "Stated"
  • "In the meantime," is unnecessary.
  • "showcased the band's trademark atmosphere" I'm not certain of whether or not "trademark" is neutral.
  • Joe Talbot saying that Bambara is his favorite band and Alexis S.F. Marshall saying that Shadow on Everything is his favorite 2018 album are both unneeded and unneutral.
  • I would indicate that Colin Joyce is a writer for Noisey.
  • Hi 100cellsman - the student hasn't returned since the 10th, so I've gone ahead and made these tweaks for you. Let me know if I missed anything. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:34, 17 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
Thanks! I'll go ahead and pass the article while fixing a couple things I forgot to mention. 100cellsman (talk) 19:39, 17 May 2019 (UTC)Reply

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment edit

  This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 30 January 2019 and 15 May 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): NicHT495. Peer reviewers: Renegadeknight3, Ethan495.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 16:00, 18 January 2022 (UTC)Reply