Talk:Baby Not on Board/GA4

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 05:14, 8 October 2012 (UTC)

• Image: Again, it doesn't really add, critically, to the article, so I'd remove it
• Infobox: Any cite for the production number?
• Lede: Fox -> "Fox network", but just link "Fox"
• Lede: add who plays who in parenthesis after the characters in the intro, also, link characters, like Peter
• Lede: This section uses the word 'episode' quite a bit. Maybe cut that down and mix it up, using 'entry', 'installment', etc
• Production: add what season "420" was in
• Production: "…that celebrities do not spawn wide…" I'm not sure this makes much sense. Trying "that celebrities do not feature wide"
• Production: comma needed after "episodes of the seventh season"
• Production: The entire third paragraph of this section is completely unsourced. Let's get some sources up in here
• Cultural references: Make sure you explain what each reference is (book, film, etc?) Some readers might not know what Back to the Future or Ghost is
• Cultural references: Period need after Back to the Future
• Cultural references: "Another scene in the spa shows a reference to Ghost with representations of Patrick Swayze and Demi Moore as their characters from the film on top of Peter's back giving him a massage." -> "Another scene in the spa reference the Ghost; representations of the film's stars, Patrick Swayze and Demi Moore, are on top of Peter's back giving him a massage."
• Cultural references: "filmd" -> "films"
• Cultural references: "when Peter is reciting is "Power to Believe"" Reciting what? Also, does that song have a link/artist?
• Cultural references: doesn't -> does not; watch contractions
• Cultural references: Lost should be italicized
• Reception: Add an explanation for what Nielsen ratings are
• Reception: The lede says mixed ratings, but this part says mixed to negative. Make this consistent
• Reception: Italicize The A.V. Club
• Reception: Add a citation after every direct quote
• References: Again, use consistent dating methods (either YYYY-MM-DD, or MM DD, YYYY)
• References: Publisher on Ref. 1 should be Yahoo! TV
• References: Remove 'Yahoo! TV' from the title of Ref. 1
• References: Link AMC on Ref. 2
• References: Link 20th Century Fox in Ref. 3
• References: Link Amazon.com on Ref. 5
• References: Link TV Guide and make it italicized on Ref. 8
• References: On Ref. 10, the publisher should be Zap2it (linked), and the work should be TV by the Numbers (also linked)
• References: Italicize The A.V. Club on Ref. 11
• References: Fix dash issues on Ref 1 (make a normal dash, i.e. -, into an en dash, like this –)
• References: There's some issues with double quotation marks on Refs. 7, 8, and 9. Quotes inside of quotes should use single quotation marks (i.e. "'Harry Potter' Is a Best-Seller")

OK, that's all I got. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:21, 10 October 2012 (UTC)

Fixed all issues except for the "Fox --> Fox Network" which I didn't understand. 181.208.45.25 (talk) 02:45, 12 October 2012 (UTC)

I got it. There's still some issues with dashes in the references, and some double quotes in the refs. Fix these, and I'll pass it.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 02:56, 12 October 2012 (UTC)

I believe it is done. Pedro J. ^{the rookie} 04:11, 12 October 2012 (UTC)

Looks good now. I will pass.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 05:00, 12 October 2012 (UTC)