Talk:B'Day Anthology Video Album/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 20:40, 31 May 2011 (UTC)

Lead

• exlusively -> typo
• exlusively at -> through
• Knowles shot nine videos for the album, with four other videos having already been filmed. -> a bit repetitive
• has been awarded -> its not really an award, its a certification of authenticity for said amount of shipments
• denoting?
• Outside of North America, -> seems a bit biased and too focused on the US, perhaps "internationally"

• That gives the impression that it was worldwide ie everywhere including North America Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)

• the album featured as a bonus disc

• Half-thought? :P Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)

• Lol, maybe "the album was featured as a bonus disc" :P--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 00:02, 6 June 2011 (UTC)

• The "Still in Love (Kissing You)" video featured a cover of a song by Des'ree and, due to a lawsuit, only initial pressings of the album contain its video. -> a bit lost here

Background

• Knowles said that she filmed B'Day Anthology Video Album -> she didn't film it, she compiled it. They were already filmed for other purposes

• Only four videos were already filmed, the other nine were filmed especially for the album

• do not have to log on to YouTube to watch her music videos, but instead can play them via DVD -> would not. Also, could be worded better
• This section could benefit from a basic c/e. The sentencing is a bit choppy
• According to Vibe, the shooting of the thirteen videos included on the album means that Knowles holds the record of the most music videos released in a twelve-month period. -> bad sentence

Release

• Released, released. -> try to avoid repetitive wording in the same sentence
• Again
• The video album featured as the second disc on international copies of B'Day Deluxe Edition albeit without the behind-the-scenes,[9] while Irremplazable was the bonus disc in the United States. -> multiple issues. Aside from the poor wording, this is the first time I have read here about Irremplazable. It needs some form of introduction
• Prior to its release, copies of the videos were ripped from an advance album and leaked onto the internet in MP4 form.[11] promoted the album by appearing on television shows -> fix
• Any sources for the appearances?

At the end of the sentence

• marking shipments of two million copies. -> Ummmm, don't you mean 200,000

• Oops, I thought that figure was surprisingly high. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)

• Marking doesn't really fit here

Lawsuit

• Main article: Kissing You (Des'ree song)#Lawsuit -> fix

• What's wrong with it? Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)

• Usually we don't have it like that. If I link the MC version of "I'll Be There", I won't have it come up with the asterisk.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 00:05, 6 June 2011 (UTC)

• a video for the song to include on -> the tense is weird.

Misc

• Any positions for a video chart in the US?

• No, I could only find three relevant Billboard issues on Google Books, but I'll ask Legolas to do a search. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)

• • As per usual, you got seven days :)--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 11:36, 5 June 2011 (UTC)

• • • Good job! Passing.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 01:38, 10 June 2011 (UTC)