Atari Calculator is currently a Computing and engineering good article nominee. Nominated by Appsoft4 (talk) at 21:48, 11 September 2024 (UTC) An editor has indicated a willingness to review the article in accordance with the good article criteria. Further reviews are welcome from any editor who has not contributed significantly to this article (or nominated it), and can be added to the review page, but the decision whether or not to list the article as a good article should be left to the first reviewer. Short description: Computer software (1979) |
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editFrom the screenshot printed in 1979 | From the screenshot printed in 1982 /> |
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ATARI CALCULATOR COPYRIGHT 1979 |
CALCULATOR COPYRIGHT (C) 1979 ATARI 0 ***
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Nominator: Appsoft4 (talk · contribs) 21:48, 11 September 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Jlwoodwa (talk · contribs) 15:43, 2 October 2024 (UTC)
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Prose
editThe article has frequent grammatical errors. In particular, there are several instances of missing or incorrect articles. For example:
In 1979, the screenshot
should bea screenshot
.program got product ID number CX-8102
should bethe program
.in the form of boxed diskette
should be eithera boxed diskette
orboxed diskettes
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Examples of more general grammatical errors:
After 1982, there was little news about the Atari Calculator, its development, and it was excluded from the listing in the next official catalogs by Atari.
Cover design and fan art illustrations assisting the article authored by Oliver Rapp.
Some sentences have too many errors for me to figure out what they're meant to say:
In addition, two source printiouts, which included code for floating-point arithmetic handling, were scanned and uploaded the Atari Calculator cartridge specification, handwritten by Shaw, and the official prited user manual for the Atari Calculator. Savetz uploaded it all with a permission from Shaw, and the original printouts Shaw had donated to and now are storing at the Strong Museum, as well as all of the materials related to Atari, she collected during her employment period at the Atari (1978–1980).
Beyond the outright errors, many sentences are too long and roundabout to easily follow. For example:
In 1979, the screenshot of the Atari Calculator, with the title ATARI CALCULATOR COPYRIGHT 1979 in the main window, was printed in the "Touch the future." brochure on the screenshots gallery page, featuring the upcoming Atari 800 computer. The UI was colored in light bluish text on a dark blue background.
I would phrase this instead as:
In 1979, Atari printed a brochure titled "Touch the future", which featured the upcoming Atari 800 computer. The brochure had a gallery of screenshots, including one of the Atari Calculator's main window. In this screenshot, the program had the title "ATARI CALCULATOR COPYRIGHT 1979", and its UI had light bluish text on a dark blue background.
This groups related information together, and gives necessary context before going into the details. jlwoodwa (talk) 18:52, 2 October 2024 (UTC)