Talk:At Seventeen/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 07:32, 14 April 2019 (UTC)

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Lead

• Ian wrote the lyrics based on a The New York Times article with a samba instrumental. Brooks Arthur produced the final version → It would be nice if you could connect these two sentences so they're not that clipped on their own
• Ian promoted it at various appearances. The song has been included → same as above
• Otherwise really great work here

Infobox

• For the lengths, it would be nice for you to use the "
  " parametre, so that they're both aligned under each other

Background and recording

• There is a space between refs no. 1 and 2
• she worried she had accidentally stolen the melody → this way, it isn't clear where she's "stolen" it from; I would say something like: "she worried she had accidentally plagiarized the melody from another recording"

Composition and lyrics

• Really great work here, nothing I can pick on :)

Release and promotion

• felt the song was too long. CBS was uncertain how → connect these somehow
• first released on August 1975 → the preposition is incorrect
• Shouldn't the infobox say "7-inch" as well?
• was four minutes and forty-three seconds → was four minutes and forty-three seconds long
• She said later → Other way around
• Ian sang "At Seventeen" on Saturday Night Live's first episode on October 11, 1975. The following year, she performed it on The Old Grey Whistle Test at the Shepherd's Bush BBC Television Theatre → connect these two sentences

Critical reception

• received a positive response from critics → no need for "a"

• The "a" is necessary. Aoba47 (talk) 20:28, 16 April 2019 (UTC)

• Change this to "Critical reception and accolades"

Commercial performance

• on the September 13, 1975, → no need for the second comma
• Everything else is very well-written

Use in media

• I would rather name this "Usage in media", but it's up to you
• Again, nothing I can really pick on elsewhere

Formats and track listings

• Great work :)

Credits and personnel

• Great work :)

Charts

• Great work :)

Release history

• Unlink everything here since everything was already mentioned above

Cover versions

• "extensively" seems very superfluous here
• requested Celine Dion perform the song → requested Celine Dion to perform the song

• The current wording is correct. Aoba47 (talk) 20:31, 16 April 2019 (UTC)

• recorded her cover of the song on fifth cover album Low Key → recorded her cover of the song on her fifth cover album Low Key

Other things

• 16.0% is a very good percentage for copy-violation
• No disambiuation links
• No dead links
• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertions made in this article

Outcome

•  On hold for 7 days — Great work as per usual and a very interesting article to read. Good luck with editing. Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:36, 16 April 2019 (UTC)

• Thank you for the review! I believe that I have addressed everything. Have a great rest of your week. Aoba47 (talk) 20:31, 16 April 2019 (UTC)

• @Aoba47: I'm passing this great piece of work to GA status since everything has been addressed. Is there any possibility you could also review one of my Eurovision GANs? If not, disregard this. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:34, 16 April 2019 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.