Talk:Ashley Freiberg/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 09:12, 7 May 2020 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this one.

Three things that jump out at me before conducting a proper review:

• The article seems to finish in 2018; is there any information on what she has done since?
  • No information about any racing activities past that year is available since she has not competed in any notable series. MWright96 (talk) 10:24, 7 May 2020 (UTC)
• Any chance of any pictures? Even if it is just of cars in one of the series she competed in, for some visual context?
  • File:-96 Turner Motorsports BMW M6 GTD (25923112306).jpg Could be used. Harrias ^talk 08:39, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
• Articles by Forbes "contributors" are not considered reliable, and should be removed per WP:RS/P (ref #2). Harrias ^talk 09:12, 7 May 2020 (UTC)
  • Removed MWright96 (talk) 10:24, 7 May 2020 (UTC)

• @Harrias: Any progress on this review? MWright96 (talk) 18:45, 17 May 2020 (UTC)

• @MWright96: Oh man, completely forgot about this. Will look at it ASAP. Harrias ^talk 18:54, 17 May 2020 (UTC)

References

• Ref #10 and #45, "Motorsport Stats" is the website, not the publisher.
  • Added MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
• Ref #15, what makes "Speedsport Magazine" a reliable source?
  • The source you refer to is in a partnership with Auto motor und sport, one of Germany's leading motoring magazines. MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
• Ref #22, #27, #35 and #38, "SportsCar365" is the website, "John Dagys Media" is the publisher.
  • Added MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
• Ref #23, #34 and #43, our article capitalises "Motorsport.com".
  • Added MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
• Ref #32, "Racing-Reference" is the website, not the publisher.
  • Corrected MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
• Ref #39, any chance of a translated title?
  • Added; Google Translate's version was quite humorous ;-) MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)

Biography

• Could you move the Personal life section to the top, given it mostly includes information that chronologically goes there? When I read that her father took her to Ventura, California, I wanted to know how close to home that was, but I had to go all the way to the bottom to find out where she was from.
  • Moved MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
• "..after playing basketball, skateboarding, soccer and studying karate.." I'm not keen on the construction here, because "playing skateboarding" seems odd to me. How about "..after skateboarding, playing basketball and soccer, and studying karate.."?
  • Done MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
• Expand "Jr Sprint" to "Junior Sprint".
  • Done MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
• Are the "Skip Barber National Championship" and the "Skip Barber National Series" different things? This confused me a little.
  • Clarified MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
• Remove duplicate link to Autobahn Country Club.
  • Removed MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)
• "..to brake the tie with Snow for the championship lead.." Two points. First: "break", not "brake". Second: which Snow, Madison or Melanie?
  • Madison Snow MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)

Overall, not much wrong with this at all. Nice work. Harrias ^talk 08:39, 18 May 2020 (UTC)

• @Harrias: Have made changes to the article and have replied where appropriate. MWright96 (talk) 09:16, 18 May 2020 (UTC)

• All good, passing. Harrias ^talk 10:14, 18 May 2020 (UTC)