Talk:ArtRave/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 02:25, 20 December 2016 (UTC)Reply

  • Please add an ALT description for the infobox image, as well as the rest of the images in the body of the article.
  • Should you put the number of shows (2 in this case) in the infobox?
  • Should location and venue be separate entries as done in Revel Presents: Beyoncé Live?
  • I am not sure the “beginning to flourish” quote is entirely necessary as I could see the same idea being told through paraphrasing.
  • You use “reveal” and “revelation” in close proximity in the first paragraph of the “Background and conception” section.
  • You use “announcement” twice in close proximity in the final paragraph of the same section.
  • It seems a little odd that you describe the video showing Gaga’s work with Abramović, but not with Inez or Vinoodh. Do you have information about their videos? If not, then it is fine as it currently stands.
  • Would it be worth it to include at the end of the second paragraph of the “Press conference” section that the Gaga’s performance in space never reach fruition?
  • This is more of a personal/style preference, but I am not sure of the value of the image in the “Concert and broadcast” section. It is rather blurry and low quality and I believe it does not add much to the overall article. I would suggest either replacing it with a better quality image or removing it all together, but again this is more up to you.
    • Actually there is no better quality image at all. I haven't been able to procure anything. I suggest we keep it temporarily until a better image is found and then replace it. —IB [ Poke ] 13:52, 20 December 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • Are the links in the “External links” section really necessary? They seem more appropriate as sources for the article rather than external links.

@IndianBio: Great job with the article! I only have relatively minor notes for improvement. Once you address my comments, I will pass this. If possible, could you look at my GAN for Trenyce? Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 03:07, 20 December 2016 (UTC)Reply

@Aoba47:, all done and let me know if any further clarification is needed. —IB [ Poke ] 13:52, 20 December 2016 (UTC)Reply
@IndianBio: Everything looks good to go, I will  Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 14:19, 20 December 2016 (UTC)Reply
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