Talk:Apartment Life

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Carbrera (talk) 03:11, 22 April 2017 (UTC).Reply

GA Review edit

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.


This review is transcluded from Talk:Apartment Life/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 09:03, 2 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

Lead edit

  • by American band Ivy. It was released → by American band Ivy, released (I suggest doing it this way as you open the article with three very short and clipped sentences)
  • Realistic (1995) → You have already mentioned the record's release year before, so you can remove this
  • forms of production created from keyboards → forms of production consisting of keyboards
  • also took place in 1999 → also took place in the same year

Infobox edit

  • Flawless ;)

Background and develoment edit

  • Dominique Durand met each other → I don't think "each other" is necessary here
  • Release year of "Get Enough" in brackets
  • which was well received by the public → you need a reference for this; just use the ones you have in the article for "Get Enough" for its critical reception
  • he had established a relationship with Atlantic Records → I would clarify that it was a "business relationship"
  • sign with them who → comma before "who"
  • much like they had been from Seed Records after the release of Realistic in 1995 → I would just remove this as you are repeating yourself with what you already wrote in the first paragraph.
  • Ivy signed to 550 Music who reissued Apartment Life → I would replace "Apartment Life" with "the album", as you have already mentioned its name two times in a row
  • During this same time → "same" is just superfluous and can be removed

Music and songs edit

  • Apartment Life served as a musical departure and improvement from the material found on their previous efforts → I would add that music critics thought that, as it is subjective whether something is an improvement or not
  • described the album as a collection as a step up → ??
  • present in the production from brass → present in the production, consisting of brass
  • the album contains influence from → the album contains influences of
  • the music by American band Pixies → the music of American band Pixies
  • Peter Nashel receive credits as co-writers of the track → Peter Nashel received credits as co-writers on the track
  • The rest of the section is very well-written and comprehensive

Promotion edit

  • Prior to the scheduled release date for Apartment Life → Prior to the scheduled release date of Apartment Life
  • It was during this time that Ivy's → replace "Ivy's" with "the group's" to avoid repetation
  • Billboard announced that a music video for "The Best Thing" would complete filming and production by the end of the same month → Billboard announced that a the filming and production of a music video for "The Best Thing" would be completed by the end of the same month
  • was released on CD on October 7 → I would still add the year of release for clarity
  • included a cameo appearance from Iha → please link to James Iha here
  • I would connect the last paragraph with the others, as it seems a little strange to have such a short para

Critical reception edit

  • You need an opneing sentence such as "Critics received the album with generally positive reviews following its release"
  • He declared that Apartment Life is → He declared that Apartment Life was
  • felt that the album displaying Ivy's strengths → felt that the album displayed Ivy's strengths
  • Robbins, also a columnist for Rolling Stone, → remove "also"
  • Release year for Nimrod in brackets
  • the album constantly was ranked → the album was constantly ranked

Track listing edit

  • Flawless ;)

Credits and personnel edit

  • What is "legal" supposed to mean?

Other stuff edit

Copy-violation edit

  • 16.7% is very acceptable!

References edit

  • As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article

Outcome edit

  • Very good work on this! I put the article   On hold for 7 days to allow your edits. Congrats on all your thorough work on Ivy!!   Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:40, 4 January 2018 (UTC)Reply
Cartoon network freak – Thanks as usual. I addressed your changes (and I assume "legal" refers to the person who handled any legal work with the record label; in the liner notes, he is only credited with "legal"). Thanks again, Carbrera (talk) 20:18, 4 January 2018 (UTC).Reply
Happy to pass this! Congrats; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:46, 4 January 2018 (UTC)Reply
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