Talk:Anthony Edwards (basketball)/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 16:39, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Taking this review as well as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 16:39, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"where he was rated a consensus five-star recruit and one of the best players in the 2019 class." - please clarify in this sentence who rated Edwards a five-star recruit
"The most heralded player to commit to Georgia in program history," - please clarify in the lead that he committed to playing college basketball for Georgia

"after watching his brothers play." - you can write either play the game. or play the sport. to expand this sentence
"He often played basketball against his brothers at their grandmother's house in the summer." - don't use phrasing such as "in the summer" per MOS:SEASON
Wikilink college basketball

You don't need the acroynms of Amateur Athletic Union since they are not mentioned elsewhere
"Edwards was considered a four-star recruit" - considered by whom exactly?
"after the summer of 2016." - another MOS:SEASON violation here
"since Holy Spirit Prep had "small class sizes and support to help that." - can be changed to either Holy Spirit Prepratory or {{xt|his new high school}
"Edwards helped Holy Spirit Prep defeat The Heritage School for the Georgia Independent School Association (GISA) Class AAA state championship." - Prepratory
Wikilink the first mention of the terms points, rebounds and assists to their respective articles
"He played in the McDonald's All-American Game and Jordan Brand Classic in the spring of 2019." - a third violation of MOS:SEASON

"By consensus, Edwards was rated a five-star recruit, top-five player, and the top shooting guard in the 2019 class." - please state exactly at the start of this sentence who formed the consensus of Edwards' ability
"On February 11, 2019, he committed to play for Georgia," - committed to play college basketball for the reasons of clarification
"Edwards was drawn to Georgia because two of his favorite players, Dwyane Wade and Victor Oladipo, had been coached in college by Georgia head coach Tom Crean." - repetition of the word "Georgia"

To make it more comfortable to read, the entire first paragraph might be better off divided into two, preferably after the sentence about Edwards' final game of the 2019 Maui Invitiational
Wikilink the first mention of the term steals to Steal (basketball)
Wikilink the sole mention in the prose of the term blocks to Block (basketball)
Wikilink the term overtime to Overtime (sports)

"Edwards' mother, Yvette, and his grandmother, Shirley," - remove "his" from this portion of text
"He has worn the No. 5 basketball jersey" - the No. term should have the abbr template used on it and displayed as follows; {{xt|No.

All of the hyphens that are contained within the references that feature them should be replaced by en dashes (–)

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to action/respond to the queries raised here. MWright96 (talk) 17:49, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

@MWright96: All comments have been addressed. Sportzeditz (talk) 18:45, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Sportzeditz: Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 19:14, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply