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  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Kuanisha, Bwork002, Mbutl001. Peer reviewers: Syntallen, RacNLuk 1998.

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I think this is a great first draft. A few changes I recommend are that you recheck over your references, because they were not laid out with any form of format. I also think maybe try to find a way to make the article move more smoothly, it just seems to jump from fact to fact without any smooth transitions. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Srea003 (talkcontribs) 18:51, 4 April 2018 (UTC)Reply