Talk:Amy Poehler/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 03:21, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Review

Early life

• The reference for the sentence "She graduated from Boston College with a bachelor's degree in media and communications in 1993" is a deadline  Done

SNL

• The sentences "Poehler joined the cast of Saturday Night Live (SNL) at the start of the 2001–2002 season. Tina Fey had tried to recruit her for SNL for years" can be combined into one sentence, it seems choppy separated.

 Done

• Try expanding the sentence "She often collaborated with writer Emily Spivey." Maybe add "whom she later starred in films with." It seems odd as a standalone sentence.
• Please try and avoid standalone sentences. Try and expand on "In 2015, during the Saturday Night Live 40th Anniversary Special, she returned to anchor Weekend Update, this time with Tina Fey and Jane Curtin."

Parks and Rec

• The sentence "Poehler was nominated again for the Primetime Emmy Award for Outstanding Lead Actress in a Comedy in 2011..... In 2011" is odd since it has two dates back to back.

 Done

• • Also, is there a better reference for her nomination? Can you please try and find an article etc. rather than her Emmy bio. This may allow for more information to be added.

I consulted other sources but used the Emmy bio because it is the most precise. Knope7 (talk) 02:19, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Host

• The sentences "2015 marked the third successive time Poehler and Fey hosted the Golden Globe Awards. Before the event they confirmed it would be their last time" seems oddly written to me.

Changed.

• The sentences "The show returned for a second season which aired in December 2019. NBC has picked up Making It for a third season" can be combined

Personal life

• Please try and avoid one-sentence standalone. Try and expand/merge "Poehler and Arnett have two sons: Archie, born October 2008, and Abel, born August 2010."

I'm confused by this. I don't expanding and merging sound like contrary suggestions. The paragraph is about Poehler and her children. It's not a stand alone sentence. It's also not uncommon to mention the births of multiple children in a single sentence. Knope7 (talk) 02:19, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Knope7, you're right, it's fine. I have passed the article. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 03:07, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

References

• Citation 99 is a deadline  Done
• Citation 56 has a different title (seems to have been updated as the URL is the old title)  Done
• Citation 147 has a broken link to People (magazine).  Done