Talk:Alsace-class battleship/GA1

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Sturmvogel 66 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 00:21, 24 August 2019 (UTC)Reply


I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:21, 24 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

  • No DABs.
  • What evidence is there that the Richelieu photo is actually USN? That's an awfully shitty image. A much crisper, colorized version can be found at [1] if you can confirm its provenance.
    • It was taken at the same time and by the same USN patrol plane as this one (and a few others on Commons) - note the identical elevation of the guns. I'll upload the colorized one
  • Second London Naval Treaty fell apart Not exactly the most encyclopedic language I've ever seen
    • No, but I can't come up with any alternatives that aren't of a similar tone (i.e., "broke down") or don't go into too much detail for a minor point in the lead - do you have any ideas?
  • But another two authors. Awkward, I'd suggest "another pair of authors"
    • Done
  • Not fond of moot as a verb. Perhaps terminated?
    • Works for me
  • Link both units for tons and shp
    • Done
  • 16 × 2 × 100 mm (3.9 in) anti-aircraft (AA) guns I'd translate this as 16 twin turrets and just use and link the abbreviated form of AA guns
  • Watch the roundings for 350 mm in the infobox, the table, and the design proposals section and for 360, 400 and 420 mm
    • I just went through my old German BB FAs and fixed a lot of these...
  • 56,000 long tons (57,000 t) ships, though French intelligence initially believed them to be only 40,000 long tons (41,000 t) vessels Turn these tonnages into the adjectival forms
    • Good catch
  • (that was to be designated Dock No. 10) that was 275 m proximity alert for "that was"
    • Fixed
  • Spell out shp with links on first use in the main body
    • Done
  • The table's awfully wide. Consider eliminating the normal displacement column.
  • Consolidate adjacent cells with identical data
  • The table shows all three proposals with identical deck armor, why then do Garzke and Duilin discuss reducing that thickness slightly?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:55, 28 August 2019 (UTC)Reply