Talk:Alonzo Clemons/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:48, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• As the individual is still alive, I do not believe that we can justify fair use on an image of him as a free one could still be created. The image needs to be deleted.
• "Clemons suffered a ..." He suffered...
• "United States of America" Just United States is fine.
• "the accident.[3] The accident" repetitive.
• "surprising" to whom?
• File:ThreeFrolockingFoals.jpg has two fields with "n.a." which are insufficient justifications for those elements of NFCC.
• Why can't a free image of that sculpture be obtained? Isn't it just outside and someone could take a photo?
  • Potentially yes, but I'd have to fly 10 hours to Chicago to do so, maybe the image could be replaced in time.--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 08:07, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• It's "frolicking" by the way, check that throughout.
• "using clay, or, " clay is already mentioned but not linked.
• "bitumen[1][2][6] to sculpt" I wuold move those refs to the end of the clause.
• "or religious symbolic" do you mean symbols?
• "a bull was" no need to link common English words.
• "[4][2][10] Subsequently" order.
• "by galleries and shown in art museums and at exhibitions around" no need to link any of these really.
• "from God and" likewise.
• Spaced hyphens in ref titles should be en-dashes.
• Consistent date formats in refs.
• If Out Front Magazine is a magazine, it should be in italics.
• Ref 6 SHOUTING.
• Ref 6 it's The New York Times, not New York Times.
• Ref 8, p. not pp.
• Ref 10, Focus is a work.
• ISBN formats should be consistent.
• Category has "outsider artist" yet this phrase isn't used at all. Suggest it's mentioned with an associated referenced if the cat remains.
• Where is the 1958 birth referenced?
• Source says he was three or four when the accident happened...

That's about it. A lot to address here for such a brief article. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 09:18, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for taking this on, I will try to address everything this weekend. DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 16:48, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Everything should be addressed by now (except the ISBN, because I have no idea how they are formatted).--DasallmächtigeJ (talk) 08:21, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

I'm still dubious that fair use applies for such a simple-to-photograph outdoor sculpture, but hey. And ISBNs should just be all 10- or 13-digits, I use ISBN.org to fix them up. However, not part of GA criteria, so I'll promote. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 11:40, 5 September 2021 (UTC)