Talk:Alexios Komnenos (protosebastos)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 01:53, 6 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 01:53, 6 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for taking the time, Iazyges. Take as much time as you need. Cheers, Constantine 10:34, 6 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

Criteria

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GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

  • 1
    1.a  Y
    1.b  Y
  • 2
    2.a  Y
    2.b  Y
    2.c  Y
    2.d  Y (Highest is 3.8%, due to citation name/a few phrases in source).
  • 3
    3.a  Y
    3.b  Y
  • 4
    4.a  Y
  • 5
    5.a  Y
  • 6
    6.a  Y
    6.b  Y

Prose Suggestions

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  • of Empress-dowager Maria of Antioch and through her ruled the Empire until he was overthrown by Andronikos I Komnenos in 1182. two suggestions here: first I'd suggest you add a link to Dowager, and I'd add Byzantine infront of Empire until he was overthrown by Andronikos I Komnenos in 1182., to reduce any possible confusion. Mostly because while you call him a Byzantine aristocrat, a layman could potentially think Byzantine was a ethnicity.
  • His birth was celebrated by the poet Theodore Prodromos, who composed a laudatory poem on the occasion. Did Theodore Prodromos have ties to the Komnenos family, or Theodore simply feel the urging to write the poem?
    • Added "court" to poet to provide a bit more context; he was merely engaging in the typical ass-licking of poets of the time towards the Komnenian ruling class. Most 12th-century poets engaged in that sort of thing. Constantine 23:10, 24 January 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • His father died in August 1142, while on campaign with his father and brothers in southern Asia Minor. recommend you add a in front of campaign, unless there is a specific name for the campaign, in which case suggest you mention it.
  • Andronikos died only a little while after his elder brother Alexios, and probably of the same illness. seems to be a weird sequence of events, since Alexios' death is not mentioned previously. If I'm correct in that before they were talking about Andronikos' death, suggest a change to His father, Andronikos, died in August 1142, shortly after his older brother Alexios died, potentially of the same illness, while on campaign with his father and brothers in southern Asia Minor.
  • The first record of Alexios in a public function suggest a change to The first recorded instance of Alexios attending a public function.
  • The marriage was aborted due to the opposition of the German emperor Frederick Barbarossa, however, suggest removing the , however,
  • @Cplakidas: That is all my comments. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 14:45, 22 January 2018 (UTC)Reply
Thanks, Iazyges. I've dealt with the prose issues you raised. As usual, if you have any further suggestions, above and beyond GA requirements, or have spotted troublesome spots, please let me know. Constantine 23:10, 24 January 2018 (UTC)Reply
Cplakidas I'd suggest you make a list of primary sources if possible. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 00:25, 25 January 2018 (UTC)Reply