Talk:Age of Discovery/GA1
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Reviewer: Magic♪piano 03:35, 1 September 2010 (UTC)
I am going to fail this nomination. Although it is clear that a great deal of effort has been put into it, and the coverage is quite broad, I believe that it presently fails criteria 1a (prose) and 2a (citation), and a non-trivial amount of work will be required to address them. Both of these came up in the FAC in June, and still require attention. Here are some specific recommendations:
- The article should be copyedited by someone with a stronger command of written English. Although much of the writing is of good enough quality, there are a fair number of ungrammatical howlers (including runon sentences, sentence fragments, and the like). (I might be in a position to do this in a few weeks, but it would be a work of some time for an article of this length.)
- Although you correctly say in the FA candidacy that "obvious" facts (like the year in which Columbus discovered the Americas) do not need citations, there are many sections containing details that I would consider unobvious or at least not widely enough known to blindly accept. For example, I doubt much of the English-speaking world is knowledgeable about the exploration of Siberia (or would even know what sort of reference works to consult for details); most of that whole section is uncited. I know this is a pain for an article of this length and complexity, but I recommend that you provide citations for each paragraph.
- If you really want this article to reach FA, make sure all of the images have {{Information}} templates that are properly filled out, with English descriptions. All of the images I checked (probably 3/4 of them) had adequate licenses, but some were a little short on descriptions and sourcing.
Not to add to your burden (or the length of the article), but I also observe that the section on global impact does not include mention of impact on the South Asian societies (India, Southeast Asian cultures, and Indonesia), or Central Asia (silk road economies).
-- Magic♪piano 20:24, 1 September 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review, Magicpiano. It is really helpful. I can proceed to add sources and image information. The Siberian exploration chapter was developed by another user, and its a field were I myself have no knowledge, but I can research for sources as well as complete the "global impact" chapter. However a review on English would be great, as I'm not a native speaker. If anyone can help on this, that would be greatly appreciated. --Uxbona (talk) 21:17, 2 September 2010 (UTC)