Talk:Aditya Mehta/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:15, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

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• "Mumbai, Maharashtra" is odd for me, it's probably more useful to say Mumbai, India.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• " player. Mehta participated" quick repeat of his surname, perhaps "He..."
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "and again continuously" probably no need for again, and almost no need for continuously, one would just assume he'd be playing during that range.
  •  Done agreed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "highest World ranking of " no need for capital W.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• Two consecutive sentences with "reached" is repetitive.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "He won the gold medal at " no need to repeat medal, that's self-explanatory.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "where Mehta made his" -> "where he made his"
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• Where is nickname in infobox referenced? And this isn't in the prose anywhere.
  • Cited it in personal life. I'm never sure where to do this sort of thing. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "for the 2007/08 season," vs "2008/2009" in the infobox. And then the article says "He began his professional career by playing Challenge Tour from 2004...." so when did his pro career start??
  • The Challenge Tour isn't professional (sort of pro-am), so I'll reword. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}
• Where are earnings in infobox referenced? Not in the prose.
  • Cited. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• Why is runner-up in italics in the infobox?
  • Not sure. Changed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "on Main Tour " the
  • Fixed. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• Why are you using slashes for the season year ranges when our articles all use en-dashes?
  • Recent move, I'll go through the lot Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "being awarded the Asian nominated" after being awarded the Asian-nominated...
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "new player on Tour" if it's not the formal title, don't capitalise.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• " The second event of the season, the Shanghai Masters Mehta defeated " comma after Masters and missing something like "saw" or "At the second..."
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• " last-16" no need to hyphenate.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• " the last-32 of a" ditto.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• Robertson doesn't need pipe.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• Nor McGill.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "due to finishing" after rather than "due to"
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "The third ranking event of the season, the Riga Masters, Mehta" again, missing something like "at the third" or "saw Mehta.."
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Aditya Mehta is brand " no need to repeat his first name.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "of Snooker website" no need to capitalise snooker.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• Burden doesn't need pipe.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "Performance and Rankings timeline" rankings.
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• "don't" - don't contract...
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• What's referencing all the timeline notes?
  • I'll bring this up at WP:SNOOKER. I've never made one of these tables, I have no idea how they get the info. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• What is No. in the tables?
  • Supposed to be a count of how many finals they've been in. I'm not the biggest fan, but I can see the need for in bigger articles (such as Steve Davis.) Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• Tables could use col/row scopes for accessibility.
  • I think I did this one ok. I'm not 100% familiar. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• Check refs are fully populated with accesdate/publication date/both as appropriate.
  •  Working Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
• Spaced hyphens in ref titles should be spaced en-dashes.
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:18, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

That's it, on hold for now. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 10:33, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Lee Vilenski ping me when you're done? Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:58, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

The Rambling Man - that should be the lot. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:00, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

Just noticed that the medals he won at the Martial Arts games for the IOC team aren't covered in the prose at all... The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:51, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

No problem - added a para on it The Rambling Man. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:36, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

I fixed a few dashes and punctuation issues there. Now, I noticed you're using flags without explanation, that old chestnut... The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 12:51, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

The Rambling Man, no problem, I simply removed the flags. I'm not sure why they are necessary when talking about major finals. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:37, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

Ok, so timeline notes need references but that seems to be a wider issue. It's not super-fundamental, but please do continue to find out how the project wishes to cite claims about tournament names etc on all such articles. I'm very happy with the rest of the work done here so I'm promoting. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:24, 4 April 2020 (UTC)