Talk:500 Fifth Avenue/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 14:15, 24 March 2021 (UTC)Reply


Comments

  • On other similar articles, I think you link facade.
  • "constructed on Fifth Avenue in the " overlinked.
    •   Removed
  • "Shreve Lamb & Harmon Associates" in infobox missing comma after Shreve. Also slightly different link in the prose.
  • ""resulted in a ... resulting in the " repetitive.
  • And then "different zoning ... different designs"
  • I think you could justifiably link penthouse.
    •   Done
  • "special Fifth Avenue zoning district in 1929, new buildings on Fifth Avenue within" could you replace the second "Fifth Avenue" with "the street" or something?
    •   Done
  • "included fast elevators" how fast is "fast"?
    • I rephrased this, since I couldn't find a source that actually specified the elevator speed, but "fast" was a direct quote. Epicgenius (talk) 20:06, 25 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "well-lit office units, ... well-lit office " repetitive.
  • "659,122 square feet " not quite what it says in the infobox.
  • Link brownstone.
  • "at 11-17 West" en-dash.
  • "at 27-29 " ditto.
  • Several other such address number ranges follow, check 'em all.
  • "corner lot development" hyphenate corner-lot
    •   Done all.
  • "become the Salmon Tower Building,[10] which" overlinked.
    •   Removed
  • "to cost $2.35 million " etc. inflate.
    •   Done
  • "the zoning ordinances" that could be linked several paragraphs previously.
    •   Done
  • "including setbacks and" overlinked.
    •   Removed
  • "was demolished.[32] The demolition " repetitive.
  • "Similar to the Empire State Building nine blocks" overlinked.
    •   Removed
  • "which designed both buildings" I think you've said they designed 500 Fifth a couple of times already.
    •   Removed
  • "and steel contractor McClintic-Marshall Co. The steel contractor" repetitive.
    •   Removed
  • Link derrick.
    •   Done
  • "was largely overlooked" by whom?
  • "and over ten" over seems odd here, what about "at least" or "more than"?
    •   Fixed I've reworded to say merely that there were several. Epicgenius (talk) 20:06, 25 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "Radio's New York City FM station" overlinked.
    •   Removed
  • "at 508-514 Fifth" en-dash, just as a reminder...
    •   Done
  • "way.[43][18][a] The" order.
    •   Done

That's all I have, nice read. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 16:01, 25 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review again. I've resolved all these issues, though I did find a few missing details that I've added to the page now. Epicgenius (talk) 20:06, 25 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
Jolly good. I fixed a couple of errant hyphens, but good to promote, nice work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:42, 25 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
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