Talk:4 in the Morning/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by HĐ in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer:  (talk · contribs) 05:32, 21 March 2016 (UTC)Reply


I am reviewing this article. Comments may arrive after three days. Simon (talk) 05:32, 21 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

GA review edit

Lead
  • "consisting in" → of   Done
  • "their love" → "her love" is more preferable here   Done
  • "however" → semi-colon or full stop   Done
  • "charting inside the top 20" → reaching the top 20   Done
Background
  • The caption of the sample is not a sentence, so the full stop is redundant here   Done
  • "starting" → from   Done
  • "the song has as its main instrumentation..." → problem   Done
  • "having a midtempo beat" → separate this into an independant sentence   Done
Critical reception
  • This section seems a bit overquoted. Try to paraphrase some reviews.   Done
Commercial performance
  • "The song was more successful outside North America" → seems a bit incomplete. I suggest it be merged with another sentence   Done
  • "... However, it was her lowest..." → This sentence does not contrast with the information given beforehand   Done
  • "somewhat better" → "somewhat" is redundant   Done
Credits
  • Again, that is not a sentence   Done

Enough at this point — Simon (talk) 12:10, 21 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

I made your suggested changes; thanks once again! Carbrera (talk) 04:07, 22 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
Passing this article. Great job! Simon (talk) 10:37, 22 March 2016 (UTC)Reply