Talk:2023 24 Hours of Le Mans/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: EnthusiastWorld37 (talk · contribs) 11:53, 5 March 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: DoctorWhoFan91 (talk · contribs) 06:03, 1 October 2024 (UTC)

I'll take this one, expect initial remarks in the next 24 hours (edit- 48-72 hours). DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 06:03, 1 October 2024 (UTC)

It's a long article, so I'll give remarks heading by heading. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 09:45, 4 October 2024 (UTC)

Lead

• three-driver teams: teams of three drivers
• Wikilink GT and Protptype like in the 2022 article.
  • No, to the racing car type, see the wikilinks for the 2022 edition
    • Done EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 06:34, 5 October 2024 (UTC)
      • No, i meant this ( Le Mans Prototypes (LMP) and [[Le Mans Grand Touring Endurance (LMGTE) cars) User:EnthusiastWorld37, like in the 2022 article?
        • Amended EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 09:44, 6 October 2024 (UTC)
• The week before the event, on 4 June, there was a test day.: There was a test day on 4th June, a week before the event.
• Their teammates James Calado, Antonio Giovinazzi and Alessandro Pier Guidi won overall after leading the final 55 laps.: Make it clear that there are multiple cars by a single team.

Background

• Separate the 3 different categories into 3 different paragraphs- The sea of blue makes it feel confusing, so the team positions will help separate them as well

Regulation changes

• the Automobile Club de l'Ouest: Add (ACO) after
• LMGTE Pro was dropped from the race in 2023, leaving only the Le Mans Grand Touring Endurance Amateur (LMGTE Am) class.: Mention that it's the only class remaining for GT racing, reads confuingly otherwise.

Pre-race balance of performance changes

• Was their any effect of the teams not consenting to the change
  • Umm?
    • I cannot find any information on this specifically EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 09:43, 6 October 2024 (UTC)

Race Results

• No changes required

Championship Standings

• Table 1 and 2 of Hypercar seem to not have any space between them in my browser, needs some

@EnthusiastWorld37: Sorry, forgot to ping! DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 09:53, 4 October 2024 (UTC)

@DoctorWhoFan91: Have made changes to the article based on the above points EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 14:38, 4 October 2024 (UTC)

@EnthusiastWorld37: Added a reply in the lead section; I'll add comments for the other headings later (semi-busy IRL). DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 06:18, 5 October 2024 (UTC)

Entries

• No changes required

Testing

• with two minutes left.[31][33][34] Toyota's No. 7 : left;[31][33][34] Toyata's No 7; Also split the para after this sentence.

Qualifying

• Hyperpole in LMP2. In LMGTE Am,: Split the para between these two sentences
• as a precaution.[65] LMP2 pole position Split here, like above

Warm-up

• Last sentence: Why did he stop there?
  • I am unable to find the exact reason for why he stopped there EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 09:59, 6 October 2024 (UTC)

Post-Race

• Had minor issues, fixed them myself

Race

• Mention the full name of pole-sitter Nielsen, as there is also a car with that name.
• Add 'the' before names of corners and Straights
• Add team names and numbers along with driver name, as it gets confusing with groups of three, see last year's article
• Read through and do some copy-editing, there were a lot of grammatical errors
• Add the hour in which something occurs if it is ambgious, for eg, the lead change in the first para should be mentioned to have occurred in the first hour
• Do any other changes you think seem good after reading last year's article.

Spot-check

Reviewing every 15th reference in general

• Ref-1: 91st staging ... centenary edition ... first running in 1923.
• Ref-16: order of their list, regardless of the category
• Ref-31: Beautiful, sunny skies
• Ref-46: Cadillac took fourth position ... Kamui Kobayashi jumped to fifth place
• Ref-61: a masterful 3:22.982
• Ref-76: increasingly wetter ... the Hunnaudieres straight is still dry
• Ref-91: the second hour ... the Dunlop chicane
• Ref-106: medical centre ... evaluations ... drivers involved are okay.
• Ref-121: tire wall ... damage to the floor
• Ref-136: match the pace ... suffered delays ... oil top-ups.
• Ref-151: ligament damage and an incomplete fracture

Overall

@EnthusiastWorld37: Added replies to two of your replies above; and added review for four more headings(remaining headings: practice, race and post-race). DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 08:56, 6 October 2024 (UTC)

• @DoctorWhoFan91: More changes to the article have been made based on the new issues raised EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 09:59, 6 October 2024 (UTC)

  I'll check it, might take a few day's time(along with the rest of the review). DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 19:58, 8 October 2024 (UTC)

  Need to read the race section as a whole, so it would still take some time. Though I only found minor grammar issues in 'Practice', which I have fixed myself. Only race, and post-race remains. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 18:54, 10 October 2024 (UTC)

  Still need to do that, it really is quite big. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 17:14, 12 October 2024 (UTC)

  Checked the race section and added remarks on what should be changed. Will do the spot-check later, and if the issues are fixed by then, will pass the article then, EnthusiastWorld37. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 13:21, 13 October 2024 (UTC)

EnthusiastWorld37, I have performed the spot-check, and am therefore passing the article. Congratulations, it was well-written, and changes and responses were timely. Well done, keep up the good work! DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 16:23, 13 October 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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