Talk:2020 Gibraltar Open/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 16:18, 4 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Am reviewing for the July 2021 GAN Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 16:18, 4 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lead edit

  • "with qualifying rounds 'taking place 11–12 March 2020." - occurring between 11 and 12 March 2020.
    • I've been told off before for saying "between X and Y" when the dates are sequential. I've reworded. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 13:12, 8 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "A number of professional players withdrew from the event, alongside 54 amateur players and a number of referees." - repetition of "a number"
  • "his 17th career" - will require a mention in the prose
  • "the highest of which a 144 made by Trump." - in which match and frame did Trump make his 144 break

Tournament format edit

  • Try not to have too many sentences starting with the words "The event" in the first paragraph
  • "The event was the final event" - repetition of "event"
  • Wikilink the term frame to the relevant article only on the first mention
  • "were unable to travel to the venue due to the pandemic," - as a result of

Prize fund edit

  • The highest break and total prize money figures are not mentioned in the WST source attached to the sentences; perphaps use the source "Entry Form – Betvictor European Series – Betvictor Gibraltar Open 2020" alongside "Tournament Prize Money | World Snooker Live Scores"

Summary edit

  • "Due to the COVID-19 pandemic several players withdrew from the event. Neil Robertson, John Higgins, Mark Allen, David Gilbert, Stephen Maguire, Ali Carter, Graeme Dott, Noppon Saengkham, Kurt Maflin, Anthony Hamilton, Mike Dunn, Fraser Patrick and Jimmy White withdrew from the event," - think the second sentence can be merged into the first with some minor shortening to get rid of the second mention of "withdrew from the event" in the current second sentence
  • Wikilink the term break to the appropriate article only on the first mention
  • "but fellow three-time champion Mark Selby was defeated by Lyu Haotian." - although accurate, there is no mention Selby was a three-time World Champion in the source attacted to the end of this sentence
  • Kyren Wilson lacking a wikilink on the first mention only
  • "to qualify for the following event, the 2020 Players Championship" - should be 2020 Tour Championship
  • "Wilson defeated Fergal O'Brien on a deciding frame before defeating both Un-Nooh in the quarter-finals" - repetiton of "defeating"
  • "and Mark Williams in the semi-finals 4–0 to reach the final." - 4–0 each to
  • "a bonus of £150,000." - earning a bonus

Qualifying edit

  • "Qualifying for the event featuring amateur players took place in Gibraltar on 11–12 March 2020." - 11 to 12 March 2020.

Century breaks edit

  • "Judd Trump made the highest break of the event in frame three of the final against Kyren Wilson." - add the number of points Trump made in his highest break

References edit

  • The World Snooker references should be either World Snooker, wst.tv or worldsnooker.tv not a mix of the three
    • Done. Reason for this is that they are actually different websites, but should now be consistent. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 13:39, 9 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • References 5 and 9 are missing the authors
  • The date formats of Reference 10 should be the same as the rest
  • Also, the same reference is missing the publication date
  • Reference 14's author should not be "RKG, Snooker"

Shall put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 18:43, 4 July 2021 (UTC)Reply