Talk:2011 WPA World Nine-ball Championship/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:50, 11 May 2020 (UTC)

Shall take on this review as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 19:50, 11 May 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

General

• The hyphens in the prose should be replaced by en dashes where appropriate
  • Whoops, forgot to run the script before nom. Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:57, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
• Ronnie Alcano and Antonio Lining are overlinked twice
  • Done a sweep. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:57, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• "The tournament was the 2011 edition" - how about competition for variety?
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:05, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
• "of the WPA World Nine-ball Championship, first held in 1990." - which was first held in 1990.
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:05, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Overview

• "and matches were a races-to-nine racks." - race
  • done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:27, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
• "The 128 players were split into 16 groups of 8 players," - repetition of the word "players"
  • done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:27, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
• "The defending champion for the event" - of
  • done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:27, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Prize fund

• "The event featured a prize fund of $250,000, with the winner of the event receiving $36,000," - repetition of the word "event"
  • done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:27, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
• "the same as that of the previous years event." - how about the 2010 tournament?
  • done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:27, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Double-elimination round

• "The previous year's runner-up Kuo Po-cheng" - how about 2010 runner-up instead?
• "The 1995 champion Oliver Ortmann lost his opening match" - Gulf Times doesn't mention the fact that Ortmann is the 1995 champion
  • I have cited that to another source. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:32, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
    • The book looks awfully like it was self-published because it has Lulu.com has the publisher and much of the content is taken from this site. MWright96 (talk) 12:03, 14 May 2020 (UTC)
      • Oh, I'm not familiar with that. I've changed to a source from WPA. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:29, 14 May 2020 (UTC)
• "Shane Van Boening, one of only two Americans on the tournament" - a second comma is missing at the end of this portion of text
• Also the text in bold of the above sentence should be in the tournament
• Radosław Babica is overlinked
• "Winners in the winners' bracket advance" - advanced
• "while those in the losers' bracket winners will play the winners' bracket losers" - played
• "on the next day." - the following day.
• "Wu lead 2–0," - led
  • I have done all of the above Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:32, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Early rounds (last 64-last 16)

• "The tournament changed to a single elimination tournament from June 29 to July 1." - a reliable source is needed to verify this sentence
• Francisco Bustamante and Tōru Kuribayashi are overlinked
• "The Round of 64 was played on the 29th." - June 29 per MOS:DATES
• "Antonio Gabica led Mika Immonen 4–1 and 10–6 when he scratched in rack 17, when Immonen won the next four racks to go hill-hill." - allowing Immonen to win
• "In the last 32 played on the 30th," - June 30
• "with Biado winning the remaining racks to win 11–9." - taking
• "Also played on the 30th, - same issue as the fourth point
• Daryl Peach and Shane Van Boening is overlinked
• "Defending champion Francisco Bustamante had only five minutes between matches," - Bustamante, who had
  • I have made the above changes (working on the source). Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:40, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
    • Now sourced. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:46, 13 May 2020 (UTC)

Later rounds(quarter-finals–final)

• The subsection should have a space between "rounds" and the opening bracket
• "and later won he match 11–2." - typo; the
  • removed "he match" entirely to avoid repetition. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
• "The two took their time on studying the nine-ball when van Boening made an errant safety" - think there is a word missing here
  • poor wording throughout, changed. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
• "Akakariyama took over ten minutes" - more than
  • done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
• "The first semi-final Orcullo faced Alcano." - semi-final saw Orcullo face
  • done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
• "I just have to win one more match."." - the second full stop is redundant
  • done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
• Wikilink bank shot to the appropriate article
  •  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
• "The final was played at 7p.m. local time (GMT+3 hours)" - the text in bold is not needed
  • done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
• "with an alternating break between Yukio and Alcano. Alcano won the lag," - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this.
  • done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)

References

• Those references that lack publication dates and authors should be included in the article
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 07:15, 14 May 2020 (UTC)
• Reference 5 is incomplete in that it the archive year is not filled in correctly, lacks the author, publication date, access date, and the 2 in the work field is redundant

Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 07:00, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• Reference 22 is missing the author, publication and access date

Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 07:00, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• Reference 27 is dead and needs archiving; it also is missing vital information such as access date and work

Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 07:00, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

Am going to put the review on hold to allow the nominator to respond/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 12:34, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

I've done all of the above, accept doing the publication dates of the sources, which may take me a little time (in the WPAs infinite wisdom, the date isn't actually shown on the item itself, you have to mix and match from other sources. Bare with me. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 07:00, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

All caught up now MWright96. I've progressed with all of the above. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 07:15, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

@Lee Vilenski: Now promoting to GA class. I've made a minor change to the article. MWright96 (talk) 08:12, 15 May 2020 (UTC)