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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 03:00, 5 November 2013 (UTC)Reply

  • "In terms of the Accumulated cyclone energy (ACE) index, 2007, at the time, featured the second-lowest value since reliable records began in 1971." - a bit poorly written. So is this no longer the 2nd lowest?
    • Right. 2010 bumped it to 3rd place. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 19:20, 9 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
      • In that case, why not something like, "At the time, 2007 featured the second-lowest value of the Accumulated cyclone energy (ACE) index since reliable records began in 1971." It helps get rid of a few commas. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 00:58, 12 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Instead of keeping on saying "2007 USD", why not add a note saying "All damage totals are in 2007 USD unless otherwise stated"?
  • "Finally, in mid-October, Tropical Storm Kiko passed just offshore the coastline of southwestern Mexico; though no deaths were reported on the Mexico mainland, the storm capsized a ship with 30 people on board. A total of 24 were killed." - why finally? Also, I'd split after the semicolon, and merge in the last bit.
  • "Factors attributing to the forecasts of both included the overall reduction in activity as a result of the ongoing multi-decadal signal and a high likelihood of ENSO-Neutral or La Niña conditions." - eek. Try rewording to something simpler.
  • "Total tropical cyclone activity totaled" - redundancy?
  • "The main contributing factor to below-average activity was presumably much above-average wind shear across the Pacific basin" - presumably?
  • "In May 2007, two tropical storms – Alvin and Barbara – developed, marking at the time the third such instance since official records began in 1949" - you should probably clarify a bit more that this refers to two storms developing in May, not just two in a month in general.
  • "can be attributed to a tropical wave that crossed Dakar " - you might want to clarify Africa here. (maybe, "in western Africa"?)
  • "where shower and thunderstorm activity gradually began to increase and coalesce over a well-defined center of circulation" - this could be shorter/simpler.
  • You only mention Alvin once by name in its section. Any reason?
  • Why don't you mention when Alvin's remnant low dissipated? Ditto 3E, 4E, Dalila, Gil, and Ivo
  • When you do PDF's, it should just say [format=PDF]. No need for the dot before PDF
  • Link Puerto Escondido in Barbara's section, and say what country
  • "Within an environment of weak steering currents, the satellite appearance " - so the satellite appearance was in an environment of weak steering currents? Watch for dangling participles! You do something similar with Dalilia - "After attaining its peak intensity... a track", as well as Ivo - "After attaining its peak intensity... increasing westerly wind shear"
  • When did Barbara become a TS?
  • "Drifting northeast, the storm maintained this intensity until landfall just northwest of the Mexico-Guatemala border at 1300 UTC the following day. Rapid weakening ensued thereafter, with the system weakening to a tropical depression at 1800 UTC. The low-level circulation dissipated six hours later, marking the dissipation of Barbara." - a date somewhere in here would be nice.
  • "Heavy rainfall exceeding 4 in (100 mm) caused many rivers to swell." - where?
  • "significant flooding killed a total of four." --> "significant flooding killed four people." No need for "a total of"
  • "Gusts peaked out at 58 mph (85 km/h)" - the "out" is unnecessary
  • "Puerto Madero" - country?
  • As a general note, try not using "shower and thunderstorm activity" too often, when "convection" is equally valid (and three words fewer).
  • "Three-E" - try avoid using this as a name. Just say "the depression" when referring to it on its own.
  • What are the "ten colonies" you speak of in Dalila's section?
  • "with at least 15 in (380 km)" - think you mean mm, but just wanna check
  • Why say "wood-built structures" when "wooden structures" is much more natural?
  • Feels weird for Erick's section to be so short.
  • Any more impact for Flossie? Also, some location inferences would be good for the storm.
  • " the center passed a few tens of miles offshore" - wha?
  • "where heavy rains led to rock and" - and roll?
  • "and killed four, two of which off the coast" - people aren't objects. Use "whom" instead of "which"
  • Consider merging Ivo.
  • "Associated deep convection dissipated later that day as Ivo turned westward" - the track suggests eastward
  • Where does the source say " nine were never found and presumed dead"?
  • "The following names were used for tropical storms that formed in the northeast Pacific Ocean in 2007. The names not retired from this list were used again in the 2013 season." - since no names were retired, I think the text needs adjustments
  • Any reason you list the CPHC names? None were used.
  • Why is Alvin listed as "0" deaths, and others are listed as "none", in the season effects table?

All in all, decent article, just a lot of small mistakes that can be easily fixed. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:00, 5 November 2013 (UTC)Reply

Oh, and I checked an earlier version of the article, and it appears you're missing impact for Gil. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:54, 7 November 2013 (UTC)Reply

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