Talk:2000 Rio 200

Latest comment: 4 years ago by HawkAussie in topic GA Review
Good article2000 Rio 200 has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
July 2, 2019Good article nomineeListed

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: HawkAussie (talk · contribs) 04:06, 21 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  


I'll sure do this review and hopefully this will be enough for Good Article status. HawkAussie (talk) 04:06, 21 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

Comments edit

Lead edit

  • ...after he started from the sixteenth position. - Change this to after he started from sixteenth.
  • It gave the first position to Fernández. - This probably is too short of a sentence and could better weaved into the previous sentence.

Background edit

  • ...of Championship Auto Racing Teams' (CART) 2000 series schedule - You don't need to link Champ Car again as you had already did it in the lead. Maybe do something like ...of CART 2000 series schedule.
  • ...consecutive year the Rio 200 - Comma between year and the
    • Not sure that would result in an improvement so I have not added an extra comma in. MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • ...first of fourth straight - I assume this meant to be four not fourth
  • ...from Long Beach two weeks earlier - This is probably an easy fix but maybe create the page for the Long Beach event.
    • Creating the article is something I planned to do in the future. MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)Reply

Practice and Qualifying edit

  • He pulled off to the left of the track on the main straight... - This isn't really clear.
  • What does the word clouting mean as I would have to look it up to know
  • I feel like we don't need to know every single person standing from qualifying as that seems slightly overboard.
    • I've decided to do some pruning of the original text that retains mention of all the drivers starting positions but in a way that is more concise. MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 1 July 2019 (UTC)Reply

Warm-up edit

Seems fine here

Race edit

Looks fine here

Post-race edit

Looks fine here as well.

Final Comments edit

Looking at the improved article, I think this is good enough. Well done on getting another GA. HawkAussie (talk) 23:20, 2 July 2019 (UTC)Reply

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.